Humans have devised varied technological ways to solve the numerous problems that surround them. From the air conditioners , computers to the new era of fourth industrial revolution including Artificial intelligence , 3D printing , Biotechnology and much more, humanity has come a long way. But what are its effects on us, have we ever thought about it ?
Some people say that our dependence on technology has increased to such an extent that we have forgotten many skills and ideas, they say that technology has led to a ‘de-skilling’ of the workforce. The simplest example such people give is that of a calculator, overdependence on which has led to a reduced manual ability to calculate. Artificial intelligence now stares them in the face and the prospect of computers taking decisions for us in our day-to-day life worries them. While such technologies were brought in for human comfort, it has reduced human effort to such an extent that many can’t pass a day without their mobile phones. I agree with this argument that overdependence has certainly promoted a sedentary lifestyle where we just sit back and order the ‘genie’ to do even the most basic tasks for us.
But that is just one side of the argument. Technology isn’t as bad as the supporters of the proposition say. Technology has allowed us to delegate the mundane tasks to the devices and focus on the bigger, more complex issues. Manual scavenging is a major problem in India and some technology lovers have created a robot to eradicate this social evil of manual scavenging in the state of Kerala,India. How can such a technology be criticised – which is saving the humanity from disgrace?. Technological progress has also helped us to make further advances in our ability to solve problems – e.g. simulation models of monsoon, created by supercomputers will help us understand the complex process of monsoon rains, which will be a boon for the farmers of India. Also, there are many fields where any kind of human error can’t be tolerated e.g. in Manned space missions , in such a project technological precision and accuracy can be the only saving grace.
Technology , like most things in the world, can’t be put into the binary of ‘good’ or ‘bad’. Technology is just the ‘means’, but the ‘ends’ or the purpose, depends upon the humans , who will use or misuse it. Over-reliance on anything is bad. Addiction, be it of drugs or technology, can’t be a good thing. Hence, we need to solve the problem of technology-addiction or over-reliance on technology but technology is here to stay and is important for human progress. The concerns about technology becoming a ‘master’ of the ‘ human-slave’ is real (like, in Artificial Intelligence), but those concerns can’t become a cause to abandon technology altogether. We must keep the technology subordinated to the cause of human welfare and we should keep sufficient checks and balances so that the concerns expressed above are simultaneously addressed.
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- As people rely more and more on technology to solve problems, the ability of humans to think for themselves will surely deteriorate.Discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. 75
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, e.g., hence, if, so, while, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 14.8657303371 135% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 33.0505617978 115% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 58.6224719101 111% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2587.0 2235.4752809 116% => OK
No of words: 493.0 442.535393258 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.24746450304 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71206996034 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.45365835021 2.79657885939 123% => OK
Unique words: 262.0 215.323595506 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.531440162272 0.4932671777 108% => OK
syllable_count: 830.7 704.065955056 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.77640449438 338% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.38483146067 205% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.4920037804 60.3974514979 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.590909091 118.986275619 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4090909091 23.4991977007 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.09090909091 5.21951772744 40% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 16.0 7.80617977528 205% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.159961019847 0.243740707755 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.05327175993 0.0831039109588 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0406202465925 0.0758088955206 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106810814217 0.150359130593 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0308359581452 0.0667264976115 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 14.1392134831 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 48.8420337079 83% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 12.1743820225 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.47 12.1639044944 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.83 8.38706741573 105% => OK
difficult_words: 128.0 100.480337079 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.