As people rely more and more on technology to solve problems, the ability of humans to think for themselves will surely deteriorate.
Discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
The language of this essay clearly illustrates both its strengths and weaknesses. The flowery and sometimes uncannily keen descriptions are often used to powerful effect, but at other times, the writing is awkward and the comparisons somewhat strained. See, for example, the ungainly sequence of independent clauses in the second-to-last sentence of paragraph 2 ("After all, today's tech-aided teens ...").
There is consistent evidence of facility with syntax and complex vocabulary ("Surrounded as we are by striding and strident automatons with cell phones glued to their ears, PDA's gripped in their palms, and omniscient, omnipresent CNN gleaming in their eyeballs, it's tempting to believe..."). However, such lucid prose is sometimes countered by an over-reliance on abstractions and reasoning that is not entirely effective. For example, what does the fact that video games "literally train [teens] to kill" have to do with the use or deterioration of thinking abilities? On the whole, however, the response develops its ideas about the ways that technology can promote isolation and conformity with well-chosen examples, even if its ideas about the positive effects of technology are less successfully realized.
Because this essay provides generally thoughtful analysis and takes a complex approach to the issue (arguing, in effect, that technology neither enhances nor reduces our ability to think for ourselves, but can do one or the other, depending on the user) and because the author makes use of "appropriate vocabulary and sentence variety," a score of 5 is appropriate.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 338, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , &apos
...ropriate vocabulary and sentence variety,' a score of 5 is appropriate.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, second, so, well, after all, for example, on the whole
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 19.5258426966 41% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 12.4196629213 16% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.3162921348 35% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 33.0505617978 48% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 58.6224719101 58% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1382.0 2235.4752809 62% => OK
No of words: 243.0 442.535393258 55% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.68724279835 5.05705443957 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.94822203886 4.55969084622 87% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.34870711675 2.79657885939 120% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 215.323595506 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.658436213992 0.4932671777 133% => OK
syllable_count: 431.1 704.065955056 61% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59117977528 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 20.2370786517 40% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 23.0359550562 130% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 90.0117179872 60.3974514979 149% => OK
Chars per sentence: 172.75 118.986275619 145% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.375 23.4991977007 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0 5.21951772744 172% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.97078651685 60% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 10.2758426966 39% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.111868659984 0.243740707755 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0441812520538 0.0831039109588 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0392898157519 0.0758088955206 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0715158087652 0.150359130593 48% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0340790734106 0.0667264976115 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.6 14.1392134831 146% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 24.11 48.8420337079 49% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.92365168539 164% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.4 12.1743820225 143% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.31 12.1639044944 134% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.97 8.38706741573 131% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 100.480337079 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 11.8971910112 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 11.2143820225 125% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 11.7820224719 136% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 33.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 2.0 Out of 6
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