People s attitudes are determined more by their immediate situation or surroundings than by society as a whole

Are People's attitudes determined more by their immediate situation or surroundings than by society as a whole? In reality, except some different situation, people's attitudes are determined more by society as a whole. Thus, I aver that the speaker dams so.

We, the people, are like monkey. Sometimes we imitate others who live in our surroundings. For example, one of my friends is a traitor, hater of own country. When my brother, a jingoist, stays with him, sometimes being manipulated by him, start hating our own country. Though his attitudes, sometimes being manipulated, change, but in many cases he is a patriot, which is determined by the society as a whole.

It may be plausible that people's attitudes are determined more by immediate situation or surroundings. For example, in our university hostel, some of the students, being a hater of alcohol, tend to drink in party arranged by others. In this scenario, as an exception, author's assertion is plausible.

Apart from the foregoing provisos, I strongly disagree with the assertion presented by the author. Attitudes contain our language, culture, way of talking etc. If I consider the language at first, I will then say that our attitudes are determined by society as a whole. For example, I speak in Bengali languages. Though when I go abroad, I use to talk in English, but still I'm much more comfortable with Bengali, and I don't change my language or way of talking despite talking in English. Since my native language is determined by my society as a whole, It cannot be readily changed. If it were determined by immediate situation or surroundings, I would change it.

The second is culture, which is determined by our whole society and not frequently changes. For example, I, being a muslim, use to say prayers in mosque. When I travel to a non-muslim country, where is no mosque, I say prayers in any how. Though the present situation does not let me say prayers, I don't give up saying prayers, since It is built by my society as a whole.

In sum, in spite of some exceptions, which I presented above, People's attitudes are determined more by their society as a whole rather than their immediate situation or surroundings.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, second, so, still, then, thus, apart from, for example, in many cases, in spite of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.5258426966 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.4196629213 32% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 33.0505617978 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 58.6224719101 84% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1833.0 2235.4752809 82% => OK
No of words: 373.0 442.535393258 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.91420911528 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39467950092 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92660472249 2.79657885939 105% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 215.323595506 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.474530831099 0.4932671777 96% => OK
syllable_count: 588.6 704.065955056 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 10.0 3.10617977528 322% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.38483146067 205% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 23.0359550562 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.1201918961 60.3974514979 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.6956521739 118.986275619 67% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.2173913043 23.4991977007 69% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.47826086957 5.21951772744 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 7.80617977528 115% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
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Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.473239053932 0.243740707755 194% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.148127392363 0.0831039109588 178% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.237507315244 0.0758088955206 313% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.314901092405 0.150359130593 209% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.248648654511 0.0667264976115 373% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 14.1392134831 69% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 48.8420337079 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.9 12.1639044944 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.69 8.38706741573 92% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 100.480337079 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 11.8971910112 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.2143820225 75% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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