peoples behavior is largely determine by the forces not of their own making
As the author claim that the behavior of the people are mainly determine by the external force which drive them behave accordingly .their action is directly proportional to external environment rather their own will .the claim rather seems very vague as most of the times it is not mandatory that external force drives our behavior .
Taking an example of examination the most of the students in will to get good marks get off for the study but most often examination pressure lead these action but it not last longer as there is a loss of motivation. It is an interior desire to study rather than any pressure of exam.
In cooperate firm the concept of deadline take a part in extra ordinary performance of the employee as deadline creates an pressure which turn employees to work efficiently and hence the behavior is manipulated accordingly.
By looking these examples we can conclude that human has its own power to evaluate things and work accordingly.as the pressure of examination works them as an external motivation but its one’s desire to study or not and in the second case in fear of losing job the employees are force to work overtime.
Hence and all we can conclude that human is animal which has its own cognitive capabilities which he /she use accordingly and neither any external force manipulate it. External factors only act as a motivation for the work but literally doing work solely depends upon particular individual
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 64, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'determined'.
Suggestion: determined
...t the behavior of the people are mainly determine by the external force which drive them ...
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Line 1, column 131, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...orce which drive them behave accordingly .their action is directly proportional to...
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Line 1, column 216, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...ternal environment rather their own will .the claim rather seems very vague as mos...
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Line 1, column 323, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...mandatory that external force drives our behavior . Taking an example of exami...
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Line 1, column 333, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...that external force drives our behavior . Taking an example of examination the...
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Line 3, column 148, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this action' or 'these actions'?
Suggestion: this action; these actions
...ut most often examination pressure lead these action but it not last longer as there is a lo...
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Line 3, column 172, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'lasts'?
Suggestion: lasts
...n pressure lead these action but it not last longer as there is a loss of motivation...
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Line 5, column 121, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...nce of the employee as deadline creates an pressure which turn employees to work e...
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Line 8, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...mployees are force to work overtime. Hence and all we can conclude that human is a...
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Line 8, column 107, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'uses'.
Suggestion: uses
...wn cognitive capabilities which he /she use accordingly and neither any external fo...
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Line 8, column 290, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...olely depends upon particular individual
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, but, hence, look, second, so
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 19.5258426966 41% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.4196629213 32% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 33.0505617978 67% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 58.6224719101 44% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1211.0 2235.4752809 54% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 245.0 442.535393258 55% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94285714286 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.95632099841 4.55969084622 87% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74381812577 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 131.0 215.323595506 61% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.534693877551 0.4932671777 108% => OK
syllable_count: 396.0 704.065955056 56% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 20.2370786517 35% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 35.0 23.0359550562 152% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 88.6679197906 60.3974514979 147% => OK
Chars per sentence: 173.0 118.986275619 145% => OK
Words per sentence: 35.0 23.4991977007 149% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.85714285714 5.21951772744 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 7.80617977528 141% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 10.2758426966 19% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.167538658287 0.243740707755 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.066299656393 0.0831039109588 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.097250234377 0.0758088955206 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0892240719446 0.150359130593 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.104686121351 0.0667264976115 157% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.3 14.1392134831 136% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.95 48.8420337079 74% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 7.92365168539 164% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.9 12.1743820225 139% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.96 12.1639044944 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.66 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 100.480337079 51% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 11.8971910112 160% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.0 11.2143820225 143% => OK
text_standard: 19.0 11.7820224719 161% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 33.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 2.0 Out of 6
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