Never in the history of humanity have we witnessed such a great accentuation on what cultivate the people’s behavior. Proponents of the environment people live in claims that people are mainly affected by the outside, while the opponents contends that it is self-determined.
One compelling argument advocated by the proponent is that people is the products of the society. All of us grow in a family as we were born, which is also a small part of the society, and must accept the influence from outside all the time. It means that people’s thinking and behavior results from the environment essentially. Therefore, most of time, people should passively take actions to adapt to whatever the society is, in order to live longer and more harmonious. Take Inuit as an example, due to the harsh condition they lived in, they have to construct special house and hunting to sustain their lives. Thus, their living habits are dominated by the environment which is something they can not control at all.
On the contrary, what the opponents insist to argue is that the person himself attaches much importance in determining his behavior. Human have the ability of discretionary, which means they can judge things by themselves rather than accept all without consideration. So if there is some regulations or convention they find unreasonable, they would like to insist their behaviors instead of accommodating. In this process, people rather than environment is crucial in cultivating their own behavior.
Besides, since people live in a society and a society is made up by every person, the two must interact and influence each other. For example, in the last 18th century, the Slavery was implemented and most all Americans accepted in the very beginning. However, there were some people considering it as irrational, so they rejected to attune themselves and make a revolution against it. Finally they rescinded the Slavery and changed the society largely. Obviously, according to the value people support, they will always revise their behaviors, either to conform or oppose, which is likely to affect the outside environment. Of course, the environment will determined by most people’s values.
Weighing the two claims against each other, it is my personal conviction that people’s right to choose the style of their thinking and behavior is enhanced in the modern period, as the global economy and multicultural values evokes openness and tolerance of our society. Within a certain range, people can arrange their own life without any constraint, only to assuring not breaking laws and not harm to others.
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...elves and make a revolution against it. Finally they rescinded the Slavery and changed ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, finally, however, if, so, therefore, thus, while, for example, of course, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 33.0505617978 112% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 58.6224719101 104% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 12.9106741573 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2220.0 2235.4752809 99% => OK
No of words: 423.0 442.535393258 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.24822695035 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53508145475 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93455565603 2.79657885939 105% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 215.323595506 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.543735224586 0.4932671777 110% => OK
syllable_count: 693.9 704.065955056 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.3885597774 60.3974514979 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.0 118.986275619 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.15 23.4991977007 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.2 5.21951772744 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.272725958192 0.243740707755 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0881571776436 0.0831039109588 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0740378037864 0.0758088955206 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.165693763034 0.150359130593 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0317384204602 0.0667264976115 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 14.1392134831 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.8420337079 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.17 12.1639044944 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.01 8.38706741573 107% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 100.480337079 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.