People's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making.
People generally behave on their own will. All the actions done is a choice made by them. People behavior might be change because of forces. But most of the time, it is a choice made by people to behave in a certain manner. In present world there are numerous forces which make people to change their decision.
People generally don’t change their behavior because of some external force. It is always a person’s acceptance to a force that changes his behavior. For example, a person might not want to respect others. One of the reasons for this change in behavior might be because of being disrespected very often. In this example, the person made a decision on his own will by his own experience. The person can also make a choice of not to change his behavior, although he is being disrespected.
There are some situtations where people’s behavior is forced to change. For example, a theif is forced to change his behavior by forces. He might be forced by people to change his behavior from being a thief. As the person is doing an illelgal work he is forced to change his behavior.
In conclusion, People’s behavior is self made and not characterised by some force. It is the will of people to change because of some forces.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 215, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...change his behavior from being a thief. As the person is doing an illelgal work he...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 14.8657303371 13% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.3162921348 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 33.0505617978 61% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 58.6224719101 55% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 12.9106741573 15% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1041.0 2235.4752809 47% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 219.0 442.535393258 49% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.75342465753 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.84690116678 4.55969084622 84% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70875954756 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 93.0 215.323595506 43% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.424657534247 0.4932671777 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 332.1 704.065955056 47% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 12.0 23.0359550562 52% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 16.6654440151 60.3974514979 28% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 61.2352941176 118.986275619 51% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 12.8823529412 23.4991977007 55% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 2.64705882353 5.21951772744 51% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 10.2758426966 19% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.267505403323 0.243740707755 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.117751052905 0.0831039109588 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0709093652498 0.0758088955206 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.197468855033 0.150359130593 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0515100620125 0.0667264976115 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.4 14.1392134831 52% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.76 48.8420337079 139% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 12.1743820225 56% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 9.38 12.1639044944 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.61 8.38706741573 79% => OK
difficult_words: 33.0 100.480337079 33% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.0 11.8971910112 42% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.8 11.2143820225 61% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 11.7820224719 59% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 33.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 2.0 Out of 6
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