The primary goal of technological advancement should be to increase people s efficiency so that they have more leisure time

Unarguably, technological advancements have contributed immensely to our society at large from automation of certain processes to ease of performing duties and also increase in human productivity. While technology has helped to reduce the time and effort needed in certain areas of human endeavors, thus increasing our efficiency, technology still cannot be applied in some of our daily routines. In my opinion, technological advancement has contributed to increasing human efficiency but not necessarily increase our leisure time, because it has only availed us more time to do some other things that technology cannot and might not be able to help us do.

Consider for example, for students, technology advancements have brought about easy access to academic materials such as journals, textbooks, and papers which can be gotten quickly online by just entering the right keyword in the search box, unlike in the seventeenth and eighteenth century where there are no materials of such. Apparently, the time for material search has been greatly reduced but this is not equivalent to having more leisure time for students. Other responsibilities are there for students which cannot be automated. This include reading of their books, compilation of assignments, tutoring of their juniors and some other things. So, in this case, technology has just offered them more time to perform other duties and not necessarily increase their leisure time.

Also, a number of people hire laborers to help them in some house chores simply because they do not have enough time to do those things for themselves. With the advent of technology, such can now purchase home appliances such as washing machines and electric blenders that help in performing the chores thus reducing their cost and availing them more time for their work and even for their family.
However, some might argue that technology has afforded humans more leisure time. If technology has helped us to automate processes in our work such as the use of software to analyze our data, the use of telephone to reach our clients instead of traveling down to them, why can't we just invest the remaining time provided us into some other things? Which is what majority will do as humans in nature are adventurous.

In conclusion, though technology has helped and will continually contribute to the increase in human efficiency, it is not equivalent to increasing their leisure time. It has only provided them more time to respond to other responsibilities as seen in the examples provided.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
... instead of traveling down to them, why cant we just invest the remaining time provi...
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Line 8, column 138, Rule ID: IT_IS_JJ_TO_VBG[1]
Message: Did you mean 'increase'?
Suggestion: increase
...man efficiency, it is not equivalent to increasing their leisure time. It has only provide...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, but, however, if, so, still, thus, while, for example, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.5258426966 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 37.0 33.0505617978 112% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 58.6224719101 90% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 12.9106741573 23% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2138.0 2235.4752809 96% => OK
No of words: 409.0 442.535393258 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.22738386308 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49708221141 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86813011144 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 215.323595506 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.491442542787 0.4932671777 100% => OK
syllable_count: 689.4 704.065955056 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 23.0359550562 117% => OK
Sentence length SD: 76.532752611 60.3974514979 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.533333333 118.986275619 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.2666666667 23.4991977007 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.33333333333 5.21951772744 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.315513057627 0.243740707755 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.1210320314 0.0831039109588 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0874725557811 0.0758088955206 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.181523499197 0.150359130593 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0710106874048 0.0667264976115 106% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.8 14.1392134831 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.61 48.8420337079 73% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 12.1743820225 123% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.35 12.1639044944 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.84 8.38706741573 105% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 100.480337079 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 22.0 11.8971910112 185% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.2143820225 114% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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