The primary goal of technological advancement should be to increase people’s efficiency so that they have more leisure time.
The topic raises the controversial issue of whether the primary goal of technological advancement should be to increase people’s efficiency or not. Indisputably, technological advancement may affect negatively on some people so they waste their time on useless technological applications and tools like gaming and watching movies. Nevertheless, it can be used in useful ways like doing scientific researches and use the electrical devices on our daily life. Thus, I generally disagree with the opinion that technological advancement may negatively affect our life and would argue that it will increase our life efficiency.
First of all, technological advancement allowed us to develop high speed computers which can be used in deferent ways to solve our problems, and to make our life easier. I would like to point out that the use of computers will save a lot of effort in doing our jobs and make every thing organized. To illustrate, let us look at the example of using computers in our daily life, if we want to find the location of a place we want to visit and we don’t know where this place is, just pick up your computer or your phone and search on it using GPS service, and in seconds you can find the shortest road to reach the location you want, and this will save a lot of time which can be useful to have more leisure time. Consequently, it is pretty obvious that using computers in our daily life can save a lot of time and efforts.
Furthermore, if we use the technology in wrong way, it will waste our time and this will make our life more difficult. Specifically, if we spent our time in playing games, this will lead to make us unfriendly and lonely. Both common sense and personal experience have told us that the use of any thing in wrong way will lead to negative effect. Hence, all the evidence above demonstrates that we should use the technology in right way to make our life easier.
Admittedly, technology advance may decrease our efficiency. this is true especially when it comes to the use of some technologies like calculators to do all the mathematical equations. In addition, this will lead to decrease the mental abilities of humans to do math. However, the above argument does not constitute a sufficient support to claim that the technology advance will decrease human’s efficiency. Because this will save much time to do the next step of the problem.
In conclusion, although there are some disadvantages of technology advancement, we can get over these problems if we use the technology in a right way to make our life easier and to increase our efficiency. As long as some measurements are performed, or some areas are involved, our main conclusion still holds. In fact, we can extend the topic to more areas, to have more leisure time, we should use the technology advancement in the best way so it can make every thing better and we can do every thing we need in shortest possible time.
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| 2019-09-23 | PATRICK WINSTON A | 58 | view |
| 2019-08-25 | Abed Alrahman | 66 | view |
| 2019-08-25 | Abed Alrahman | 66 | view |
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- The primary goal of technological advancement should be to increase people’s efficiency so that they have more leisure time. 66
- The primary goal of technological advancement should be to increase people’s efficiency so that they have more leisure time. 66
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...etter and we can do every thing we need in shortest possible time.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, look, may, nevertheless, second, so, still, thus, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, in short, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 19.5258426966 51% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 28.0 12.4196629213 225% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 19.0 14.8657303371 128% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 62.0 33.0505617978 188% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 68.0 58.6224719101 116% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2444.0 2235.4752809 109% => OK
No of words: 508.0 442.535393258 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.81102362205 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74751043592 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88674239699 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 215.323595506 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.437007874016 0.4932671777 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 799.2 704.065955056 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 6.24550561798 192% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 75.0537140986 60.3974514979 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.2 118.986275619 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.4 23.4991977007 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.15 5.21951772744 156% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.256512366688 0.243740707755 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.090641119245 0.0831039109588 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.102615354506 0.0758088955206 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161012107645 0.150359130593 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0955331020352 0.0667264976115 143% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 14.1392134831 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.8420337079 94% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.1743820225 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 12.1639044944 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.83 8.38706741573 93% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 100.480337079 95% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.