The real talent of a popular musician cannot accurately be assessed until the musician has been dead for several generations, so that his or her fame does not interfere with honest assessment
Having special talent in any artform is not something maseurable. prompt suggests that it is not possible to findout real talent of some musicain until she/he died because of the reputation of him/her when he/she was alive. I strongly disagree with that statement.there are so many musicians who are talanted and also unknown to audiences. there are 2 reasons for that oppinion of mine.
at first, there is no real conecction between talen and and fame. for instance, many musicians like Antonio Salieri were really talented at that time and it was so obvious even without assessment but they were not prominent figure. this once again shows that popularity and talent don't have any realation with one another.
secondly, there are so many famouse musicians that are not talented and that is easy to underestand. for example so many hit pop stars are so worldwidely famous but not gifted. so you can not always count on being famous.
so it could be mentiond that fame don't let real talent to shine but that statement is not true because you can see motzart that was well-known at his time and also be so appreciated. to sum up we have to realize that popularity does not interfere with real talent and gift.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ny artform is not something maseurable. prompt suggests that it is not possible to fin...
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...t statement.there are so many musicians who are talanted and also unknown to audiences....
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...alanted and also unknown to audiences. there are 2 reasons for that oppinion of mine...
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... 2 reasons for that oppinion of mine. at first, there is no real conecction betw...
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...ere is no real conecction between talen and and fame. for instance, many musicians like...
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... conecction between talen and and fame. for instance, many musicians like Antonio S...
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...ent but they were not prominent figure. this once again shows that popularity and ta...
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... again shows that popularity and talent dont have any realation with one another. ...
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...lented and that is easy to underestand. for example so many hit pop stars are so wo...
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...at his time and also be so appreciated. to sum up we have to realize that populari...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, really, second, secondly, so, well, for example, for instance, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 12.4196629213 24% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 33.0505617978 85% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 58.6224719101 39% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1008.0 2235.4752809 45% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 210.0 442.535393258 47% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.8 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.80675409584 4.55969084622 83% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55241648874 2.79657885939 91% => OK
Unique words: 124.0 215.323595506 58% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.590476190476 0.4932671777 120% => OK
syllable_count: 324.0 704.065955056 46% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.2370786517 59% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 44.485016204 60.3974514979 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.0 118.986275619 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5 23.4991977007 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.83333333333 5.21951772744 150% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 7.80617977528 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.336070549052 0.243740707755 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108677666558 0.0831039109588 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0488792574975 0.0758088955206 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.190476912008 0.150359130593 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.037291415473 0.0667264976115 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 14.1392134831 70% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 48.8420337079 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 12.1743820225 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.26 12.1639044944 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.01 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 100.480337079 47% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 33.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 2.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.