Some people believe that competition for high grades motivates students to excel in the classroom. Others believe that such competition seriously limits the quality of real learning.
Is competition for high grades good or bad for students? Today, we see competition everywhere and everyone is competing in one way or other. For instance, we compete for high grades with collegemates, we compete for better work performance with coworkers, and we compete on who touches the finish line first in sports. At some respects, competition can be a good thing and when taken seriously or when taken to another level, competition can lead to destruction. Although some people might argue that competition is a vital part in aiming for high grades in classroom, I believe that competition has more cons than pros.
First of all, competition is inherent in human nature. We all are competing in our daily lives. Therefore, students already have the competitive nature in them. If we try to teach them to be more competitive this will only lead to troubles in school and in their adult lives. For instance, let us take Tiger Woods as an example. He is a well-known golf player and he took the sport of golf to another level. But due to his high overreaching sense, his personal life was destroyed. His dad pushed him from the very early age to be the ultimate competitor. Thus, I believe in classroom, when learning is the main priority, over competition can damage the learning curve. Learning has to be done in a nurturing and peaceful environment. Although competition is good for exams and getting high grades, when we take competition too seriously, students would not study or learn but they would do anything they can to get higher grades than their classmates. Now, winning becomes their priority rather than learning. This is why we witness cheating in exams within students. Later, when they have to apply the knowledge they have learned here in college, they will have trouble because they did not actually learn anything. This is why I believe only a certain level of competition should exist in school.
Next, high competition will also lead to a non-friendly environment in school. With competition, students might be passing with flying colors but they might have social problems. When we are competing with each other, we tend to think how to be better than them. For instance, when we know and understand something in class, we would not teach our friends whom do not understand because we want to get higher grades than them. We want to be first. This is not a good environment for learning. This could be destructive to students and it will not make students be a good-natured human. Students should not only help each other but they should help their friends too. When we teach students a sense of coorperation between them, they will be a useful human being to the world in future despite getting good grades. In NASA, if people are competing with each other constantly, our entire space program would be jeapordized. People should be willing to help each other.
Lastly, the most destructive economic collapse was caused by leaders in American banks and financial institutions that were obssesd in competing for the mighty dollar. We can see a lot of examples in which over competitiveness leads into trouble. This is why, from an early age, we should teach our children to learn and not to be just competitive in getting high grades.
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- Some people believe that competition for high grades motivates students to excel in the classroom. Others believe that such competition seriously limits the quality of real learning. 50
- The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition. 50
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, if, lastly, so, therefore, thus, well, as to, for instance, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 31.0 19.5258426966 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 23.0 12.4196629213 185% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 14.8657303371 128% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 33.0505617978 179% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 58.6224719101 111% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 12.9106741573 170% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2717.0 2235.4752809 122% => OK
No of words: 558.0 442.535393258 126% => OK
Chars per words: 4.86917562724 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.86024933743 4.55969084622 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71620804213 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 256.0 215.323595506 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.458781362007 0.4932671777 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 818.1 704.065955056 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 22.0 6.24550561798 352% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 10.0 3.10617977528 322% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 34.0 20.2370786517 168% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 23.0359550562 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.687643041 60.3974514979 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.9117647059 118.986275619 67% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.4117647059 23.4991977007 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.94117647059 5.21951772744 56% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 14.0 5.13820224719 272% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.259563180185 0.243740707755 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0770969590368 0.0831039109588 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0832963800781 0.0758088955206 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.186220740254 0.150359130593 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.10411345343 0.0667264976115 156% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 14.1392134831 69% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 48.8420337079 130% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 12.1743820225 69% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.67 12.1639044944 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.23 8.38706741573 86% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 100.480337079 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.2143820225 75% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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