Some people believe that increasing violence in the media is the cause of increasing violence in our society especially among children Others believe that children s peer groups and parental role models are a much more powerful influence on children s beh

Given the background of a much exposed way to raise a child in this generation, media plays a vital role in influencing a child's behavior. However, children are moulded in the hands of the society in which they grow up. It is evident from the fact that children reflects parent's behavioral pattern. Therefore the intensity to which they are influenced by their peer groups are incongruent with the effect of any violence scenes telecasted in media.

The reason behind the children's behavior can be imputed to three major patterns : people they meet on a routine basis, time and conversation spent with parents and finally the circumstances they face. People whom they interact on daily basis can be their teachers, well wishers, relatives , friends, colleagues and others. Children observe and learn the characteristics of such people, trying to inculcate the knowledge they gain in order to experiment with the visuals they noticed. Though there are chances for a constructive development, there are high possibility for them to get diverted in to a misleading pathway. Thus, spending time and conversing with parents can refine the thought process a child undergoes.

Whenever children chooses their personal ways to build life, it is better to discuss their plan to their parents. But when a parent is unavailable at the time of taking decision, or giving opinions to refine their ideas, it can lead to a devastation. Often children adopt the role model from their grandparents or parents. It can either me detrimental or influential positively. Moreover, they are not willing to change their much entrenched ideas and values they instil in them at a very early age.

Situations and circumstances in which a child is raised, plays a predominant role equally to that of a parent. When a child grows in a very settled life, he can either be a scholar or a spoiled based upon the values his parents teach him. There are situations where children are mostly bullied, annoyed or teased, it can surely affect the mental well being. It is because of the society in which they grow up. Further, they are left lonely most of the time with only nannies around. Hence, a good parenting to lend ears and shoulder to a child is highly important in this case.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
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Suggestion: ,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, hence, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, thus, well

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 33.0505617978 106% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 58.6224719101 90% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 12.9106741573 46% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1877.0 2235.4752809 84% => OK
No of words: 379.0 442.535393258 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.95250659631 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41224685777 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75118706183 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 215.323595506 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.548812664908 0.4932671777 111% => OK
syllable_count: 571.5 704.065955056 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.38483146067 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.4871210155 60.3974514979 60% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.85 118.986275619 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.95 23.4991977007 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.45 5.21951772744 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.172085927368 0.243740707755 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0559423296064 0.0831039109588 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0476525499358 0.0758088955206 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117507941045 0.150359130593 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0643779209337 0.0667264976115 96% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 14.1392134831 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 48.8420337079 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.1743820225 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.43 12.1639044944 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.86 8.38706741573 106% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 100.480337079 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.


Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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