Recently, there is a widely discussed question that whether traveling to and living in different places helps improve ones' interpersonal social skill. Some may hold that during travel our ability to relate and connect to others can be enhanced. However, I cannot agree with it. From my perspective, staying in one place is a better choice.
To begin with, it is true that traveling allows us to meet more different people, and thereby indeed increase our ability to connect to other people. To be more specific, during traveling, we will inevitably interact and communicate with various people from different regions, living in diverse cultures and speaking foreign languages. We have to respect the diversity and overcome the difficulties to continue our journey. In this process, we can learn a lot about how to handle our relationships with people. For instance, when we travel to Thailand, although we cannot understand their language, we can try our best to understand them in body language. Hence, traveling indeed benefits our social ability.
Furthermore, despite traveling enables us to meet more people, we can hardly develop a strong relationship with them. So instead of living in numerous places, staying in one place can better helps us to cultivate the ability. What I mean is that, only by staying in a single place, we are able to living with a specific group of people. As a result, we can communicate with them frequently in daily life, and build a develop a deep understanding of the community. For example, as we go to university, we usually meet our classmates or professors everyday. They are exactly the most familiar people in our college life. Therefore, living in one place enable us to build up social skill better.
In conclusion, the living in single place contributes to developing of one’s ability to relate and connect to other people.
- Some believe that local communities should rely on citizen volunteers for projects benefiting those communities e g organizing youth sports leagues and collecting donations for charity Others believe that local communities are better served when professio 50
- As people rely more and more on technology the ability of humans to think for themselves will surely deteriorate 40
- As people rely more and more on technology the ability of humans to think for themselves will surely deteriorate 50
- According to a recent report by our marketing department during the past year fewer people attended Super Screen produced movies than in any other year And yet the percentage of positive reviews by movie reviewers about specific Super Screen movies actual
- The following memo was published by the Welzaton City Commission A recent nationwide study of the effectiveness of wearing a safety helmet while bicycling indicates that ten years ago approximately 35 percent of all bicyclists reported wearing helmets whe 59
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 161, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'holds'.
Suggestion: holds
...es interpersonal social skill. Some may hold that during travel our ability to relat...
^^^^
Line 3, column 415, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...hem frequently in daily life, and build a develop a deep understanding of the community. ...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 546, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...ually meet our classmates or professors everyday. They are exactly the most familiar peo...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, so, therefore, for example, for instance, i mean, in conclusion, as a result, it is true, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 19.5258426966 41% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.3162921348 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 38.0 33.0505617978 115% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 58.6224719101 90% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 12.9106741573 15% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1564.0 2235.4752809 70% => OK
No of words: 310.0 442.535393258 70% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04516129032 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19604776685 4.55969084622 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.818025818 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 215.323595506 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.538709677419 0.4932671777 109% => OK
syllable_count: 505.8 704.065955056 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.5710823683 60.3974514979 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.8888888889 118.986275619 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.2222222222 23.4991977007 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.11111111111 5.21951772744 155% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.286262490548 0.243740707755 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101043329806 0.0831039109588 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0944014877658 0.0758088955206 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.236729847473 0.150359130593 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0986003116875 0.0667264976115 148% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 14.1392134831 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.8420337079 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.71 12.1639044944 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.35 8.38706741573 100% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 100.480337079 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.