Responsibility and accountability are two things that every person should develop in his life that is what makes the individual and the country prosper. In this modern world it is common for the young adults to seek for freedom and also there are might be some who still prefers to live with their families. I am from India and here it is not common for young adults to live on their own but still in my opinion youth should be given independence from their parents as soon as they reach an appropriate age. There are quite a few reasons for that opinion of mine.
The first reason is the accountability when we are kids for every action we do good or bad our parents are held accountable like for instance in a class if a student misbehaves his parents will be called upon and will be made guilty for not controlling their kids actions. So when a young adult is living on his own he is responsible for every action of his and decision he makes and also will have to face the consequence of it. By learning from his mistakes it gives him a chance to develop and be a better person.
The other reason is responsibility as long as we are living with our parents they will take care of us like providing good food, clothes and checking on us everytime if we are doing something useful with our time or not. But once we are on our own he have to take care of everything right from cooking food, washing clothes and have to keep on track with our studies. Every decision that we make will have a direct impact on our future, so we are completely responsible for everything that might happen in future.
One can say it is safe for the young adults to live with their parents but parents will not always be there to protect their child from every possible harm. So, the child has to learn on his own to protect himself from danger where giving independence from their parents is a good start to it. So, as said I feel young adults should be given independence from their parents as soon as they reach appropriate age and when parents think their child is wise enough to live on his own.
- TOEFL integrated writing Altruism
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 252, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'has'.
Suggestion: has
...e or not. But once we are on our own he have to take care of everything right from c...
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Line 3, column 504, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...nsible for everything that might happen in future. One can say it is safe for the young...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, still, as to, for instance, i feel, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.5258426966 133% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 33.0505617978 166% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 58.6224719101 82% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1696.0 2235.4752809 76% => OK
No of words: 389.0 442.535393258 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.35989717224 5.05705443957 86% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.40565327441 2.79657885939 86% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 215.323595506 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.437017994859 0.4932671777 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 544.5 704.065955056 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 6.24550561798 16% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.2370786517 64% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 23.0359550562 126% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 52.6266294776 60.3974514979 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.461538462 118.986275619 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.9230769231 23.4991977007 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.76923076923 5.21951772744 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.325019249589 0.243740707755 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.134334120108 0.0831039109588 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.103366813682 0.0758088955206 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.214708068533 0.150359130593 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.100184607039 0.0667264976115 150% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 14.1392134831 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.96 48.8420337079 121% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.2 12.1743820225 100% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.6 12.1639044944 71% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.9 8.38706741573 82% => OK
difficult_words: 45.0 100.480337079 45% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.8971910112 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 11.2143820225 121% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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