Sports stars and movie stars have an obligation to behave as role models for the young people who look up to them. In return for the millions of dollars that they are paid, we should expect them to fulfill this societal responsibility.
The passage claims that sports and movie stars are obligated to behave as role models in return for the millions of dollars they are paid, I mostly disagree with this notion.
Firstly, the sports and movie stars are paid such a high amount because they have created that value for themselves by working rigorously throughout their respective careers. This value has led to the attraction of millions of people as audience when they are playing, in case of sports and millions of viewers, in case of movies. These stars are ordinary citizens just like us and should have the autonomy in how they wish to behave in society. There should not be any pressure on them regarding the same.
Secondly, many of these sports and movies have a major contribution to the economy of the country, they create employment and many other businesses are dependant on them as well. For instance, there are approximately 250 people involved in the creation of a single movie, meaning that their earning depends on the role they play in such movies. This in a way proves that the contribution these famous personalities are making is at par to what they are being paid and they are not obligated to anything.
Thirdly, many sports persons represent the nation in various global events like the olympics, the world cup in case of soccer and cricket and much more. In this way, they are creating recognition for their country worldwide. Similarly, movies win awards at events which are held worldwide, bringing recognition and respect for their country. The sport and movies stars play a major role in making these possible.
Alternatively, these stars should be treated in the same way as any other citizen, they should not have the misconception that whatever they do will be let gone. Justice should be equal for all and they should know that though they have an eminent position in the society, that does not give them the power to take the law in hand. Generally, the youth looks up to these stars and wishes to have a life like them, and in that case they do play a role in shaping a minor part of the youth and are the role models for them, thus they are expected to behave in a certain way.
Sports stars and movie stars are looked up to and respected by many people in the society and they should act as their role models, but this has no connection with the amount they ae paid. The millions of dollars which are paid are for their talent and they deserve it.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 153, Rule ID: DEPENDENT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'dependent' on?
Suggestion: dependent
...mployment and many other businesses are dependant on them as well. For instance, there ar...
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Line 9, column 574, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...re expected to behave in a certain way. Sports stars and movie stars are looked ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, look, regarding, second, secondly, similarly, so, third, thirdly, thus, well, for instance, in the same way
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.5258426966 118% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 14.8657303371 135% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 33.0505617978 157% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 58.6224719101 99% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2027.0 2235.4752809 91% => OK
No of words: 435.0 442.535393258 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.65977011494 5.05705443957 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56690854021 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.3795668694 2.79657885939 85% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 215.323595506 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.445977011494 0.4932671777 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 623.7 704.065955056 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.1748545301 60.3974514979 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.235294118 118.986275619 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.5882352941 23.4991977007 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.76470588235 5.21951772744 149% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.48743052312 0.243740707755 200% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.170091174183 0.0831039109588 205% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0993734435736 0.0758088955206 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.296994223671 0.150359130593 198% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0943678197588 0.0667264976115 141% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 14.1392134831 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 48.8420337079 129% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.04 12.1639044944 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.93 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 100.480337079 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.8971910112 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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