I strongly agree with the speaker’s assertion that the surest indicator of a great nation is fundamentally determined by the general welfare of its people. Admittedly, the achievements of its rulers, artists or people from various fields might serve as an indicator of a great nation, but it can only be an accessory, not a necessity.
The first reason why I agree with the speaker’s statement is concerning with the final pursuit of a great nation. Countries in any democratic world or socialist world will no exceptionally set the improvement of the general welfare of its people as their ultimate goal. Special report on those representatives of its public figures, renowned scientists and artists, are all deemed as the inclination to a preference with a minuscule group of people in sociologists eyes, who believe this action would just bring about a social frenzy to emulate for the representatives and thus it’s harmful for the society. For example, any despotic country would place its supreme leader to the extent that comparable to the god, as a result, people under that regime will have to live in accordance with the ways its leader advocates, in any situation we can hardly name this country as a great one.
The second reason deals with the should-be good ethics a great nation should advocate. Despite the fact that a so-called great nation might claim it has a host of excellent specialists or world-renowned artists, without the fundamental enquiry about the core ethics owned by these people, the recession of it will only be a matter of time. For example, in the late 18th century when Great Britain still held as the dominant power in this world, however, due to its failure to reflect on the determinants of its position,that is, the good ethics held by its people, those more down-to-earth Americans who valued similar good ethics then overtook its dominance indicating its later vitalization and prosperity. Thus, a great nation is not represented by its achievements, but by the brilliant spirits held by its people.
Those steadfast supporter of chauvinists might display a strong agreement with the speaker. Supporters might disregard the overall welfare of its people and claim that thanks to some critical achievements of certain group of people wins the whole nation’s reputation in the world. Accrediting the accomplishments solely to those people is actually separated the foundation from its result. In my observation, most of those achievements were funded by governments, where its money directly came from its taxpayers. In other words, complete and achieve such accomplishments inextricably bears a relationship with its people. Reversely, taxpayers’ contributions can better serve to resulting in more achievement of such kind.
In sum, the speaker overly simplify the determinant of a great nation. When it comes to the judgement of a great nation, consider achievements is by no means a sole indicator, but to add the general welfare of its people in this issue.
- The surest indicator of a great nation is represented not by the achievements of its rulers, artists, or scientists, but by the general welfare of its people. 58
- Many Lives might be saved if inoculations against cow flu were routinely administered to all people in areas where the disease is detected. However, since there is a small possibility that a person will die as a result of the inoculation, we cannot permit 41
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Discourse Markers used:
['actually', 'but', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'second', 'so', 'still', 'then', 'thus', 'for example', 'as a result', 'in other words']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.254054054054 0.240241500013 106% => OK
Verbs: 0.0990990990991 0.157235817809 63% => OK
Adjectives: 0.104504504505 0.0880659088768 119% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0414414414414 0.0497285424764 83% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0522522522523 0.0444667217837 118% => OK
Prepositions: 0.127927927928 0.12292977631 104% => OK
Participles: 0.0234234234234 0.0406280797675 58% => OK
Conjunctions: 3.12893860847 2.79330140395 112% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0216216216216 0.030933414821 70% => OK
Particles: 0.0018018018018 0.0016655270985 108% => OK
Determiners: 0.135135135135 0.0997080785238 136% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0234234234234 0.0249443105267 94% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0162162162162 0.0148568991511 109% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3037.0 2732.02544248 111% => OK
No of words: 489.0 452.878318584 108% => OK
Chars per words: 6.21063394683 6.0361032391 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70248278971 4.58838876751 102% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.38036809816 0.366273622748 104% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.288343558282 0.280924506359 103% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.200408997955 0.200843997647 100% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.159509202454 0.132149295362 121% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.12893860847 2.79330140395 112% => OK
Unique words: 250.0 219.290929204 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.511247443763 0.48968727796 104% => OK
Word variations: 60.1980694623 55.4138127331 109% => OK
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6194690265 87% => OK
Sentence length: 27.1666666667 23.380412469 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 85.5387429368 59.4972553346 144% => OK
Chars per sentence: 168.722222222 141.124799967 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.1666666667 23.380412469 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.722222222222 0.674092028746 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.94800884956 101% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.21349557522 134% => OK
Readability: 56.0010224949 51.4728631049 109% => OK
Elegance: 2.10280373832 1.64882698954 128% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.671617038799 0.391690518653 171% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.110869250969 0.123202303941 90% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0537156096966 0.077325440228 69% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.586918354883 0.547984918172 107% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.150781026926 0.149214159877 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.299688198054 0.161403998019 186% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.146953914267 0.0892212321368 165% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.454631046966 0.385218514788 118% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0359281736844 0.0692045440612 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.516095181388 0.275328986314 187% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.103963496215 0.0653680567796 159% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.4325221239 144% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.30420353982 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88274336283 61% => OK
Positive topic words: 14.0 7.22455752212 194% => OK
Negative topic words: 0.0 3.66592920354 0% => More negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.70907079646 37% => OK
Total topic words: 15.0 13.5995575221 110% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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