True success can be measured primarily in terms of the goals one sets for oneself.
In my opinion, it is undeniably true that someone may claim that degrees of completion of one’s goals can be used as a measurement for true success. However, when asked about whether the true success primarily can be measured by the degree of completion of the goals one set to oneself, common sense tells me that goals can be flexible, as it can be unreasonable, unrealistic, even immoral. As a result, achieving certain goal cannot necessarily lead to true success.
To begin with, in terms of education, true success is still able to be achieved even if one’s goals have not been reached perfectly as is valued differently for people from all walks of lives. By ways of example, for a college student, a true success usually comes not from the external objectives, but from a gain in learnability as well as adaptive mindset. The student may set a goal to get an ideal grade for an academic examination, but he/she would still be capable of harvest true success, as in order to achieve good grades, he/she may contribute more efforts in study to enhance study efficiency and find smart ways to study, he/ she also draws on significant amount new knowledges that enrich academic life. When he/she reflect upon this process, true success can be truly felt despite of the final results of the exam. Those good qualities can hardly be measured objectively but they help the student to harvest great success in a broad sense. Therefore, fulfill one’s target is not primarily the way to measure a true success.
Secondly, when it comes to commercial industry, possibility may exist that the goal one set does harm to others’ interest, and even pose threat to the society. Then in this way, the fact that one achieves this goal will not be recognized as true success by the public, even by himself. For instance, Sanlu, was once a Chinese native brand famous for its infant’s formula milk powder. However, in order to achieve its goal to seize its market in major poor rural area in China during its competition with other native as well as import milk powder, Sanlu chose to lower its cost by adding cheap illegal chemical into its product milk powder so that the proportion of protein in its milk powder could reach to a qualified level in a much lower cost. Unaware of this cheating behavior, many parents at that time chose to purchase this “problematic milk powder” for its cheap price. Sanlu achieved its goal to increase its sales but soon parents found their babies sick seriously after drinking milk powder, some even got kidney stone and near death. Admittedly, Sanlu successfully achieved its sale goal and seized its market in a short period of time, but will anyone regard this was a true success for Sanlu? In this case, true success is primarily being valued along with moral standard.
In conclusion, although some may concern that setting a clearly defined goal and complete it can be treated as a success, I maintain that a true success of certain goal will require a further scrutinization of the goal itself. Also, a true success can be obtained even without meeting ones’ expectancy.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 731, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'reflects'.
Suggestion: reflects
... that enrich academic life. When he/she reflect upon this process, true success can be ...
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Line 5, column 1135, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...e goal and seized its market in a short period of time, but will anyone regard this was a true...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, then, therefore, well, for instance, in conclusion, as a result, as well as, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 12.4196629213 153% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 33.0505617978 151% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 70.0 58.6224719101 119% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2590.0 2235.4752809 116% => OK
No of words: 536.0 442.535393258 121% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83208955224 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81161862636 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56067765643 2.79657885939 92% => OK
Unique words: 278.0 215.323595506 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.518656716418 0.4932671777 105% => OK
syllable_count: 806.4 704.065955056 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.10617977528 225% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 23.0359550562 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 81.9395764135 60.3974514979 136% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.315789474 118.986275619 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.2105263158 23.4991977007 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.57894736842 5.21951772744 164% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.523823849331 0.243740707755 215% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.194360475034 0.0831039109588 234% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.129087036322 0.0758088955206 170% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.390963682531 0.150359130593 260% => Maybe some contents are duplicated.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.150146320223 0.0667264976115 225% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 14.1392134831 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 48.8420337079 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.1743820225 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.03 12.1639044944 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.97 8.38706741573 107% => OK
difficult_words: 134.0 100.480337079 133% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.2143820225 118% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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