Twenty years ago, Dr. Field, a noted anthropologist, visited the island of Tertia. Using an observation-centered approach to studying Tertian culture, he concluded from his observations that children in Tertia were reared by an entire village rather than by their own biological parents. Recently another anthropologist, Dr. Karp, visited the group of islands that includes Tertia and used the interview-centered method to study child-rearing practices. In the interviews that Dr. Karp conducted with children living in this group of islands, the children spent much more timetalking about their biological parents than about other adults in the village. Dr. Karp decided that Dr. Field's conclusion about Tertian village culture must be invalid. Some anthropologists recommend that to obtain accurate information on Tertian child-rearing practices, future research on the subject should be conducted via the interview-centered method.
In the argument, the author put much emphasis on Dr Karp’s interview-based method and suggests that,according to some anthropologist future research should be based on Dr Karp’s approach. To support his claims he states the result obtained from the interview on some children. But his contention is based on some unwarranted assumptions,that ,to make the claim more viable needed to be addressed. To make his argument more cogent,following three questions should to be answered.
The author compare two experiments which were separated from each other by a 20 years of gap. What if the family practices has changed a lot over the course of time?It may happen that at the time when Dr. Filed conducted is experiment social structure of the island was such that children were actually reared by the entire village but that practice have changed over time. May be due to social, economic,political and technological changes the family has shifted to family-centered child rearing approach .If this is the case ,then Dr. karp’s assertion about the invalidity of Dr Field’s Conclusion about Tertian village culture may not hold water.
Secondly, Dr karp’s conclusion was based on interviewing some children from some islands along with Tertia. What if the children asked were not actually a representative sample of the whole village? Maybe he asked some random children on the street or may be they were from other island while the practices were totally different than that of the Tertia. Moreover, what questioned were asked during the interviews is another matter to be carefully examined. Perhaps, he explicitly asked the children about their parents and no questions were asked about the villagers. That’s why they were talking more about their parents. If that is the case ,then some questions raise about the authenticity of the interview he conducted.
Finally, the author’s intimation about future experiments in accordance with ‘some’
experts’ recommendation is rife with some holes and questions that is required to be answered. What do other experts suggest? Maybe there are some experts who supports Dr karp’s method but rest of the experts are actually not sure about the viability of the method. Perhaps, they (the rest of the experts) support the previous method of observation conducted by Dr Field. It may also happen that, some experts support interview-based method just because it proved to be working in a different region where social practices were totally different but there is no guarantee that it will work in the Tertia island.
The author needs to give a thorough and scientific explanation about how the interviews were conducted, on whom they were conducted what questioned were asked. Posing a conclusion based on some experts suggestion ,rather than
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, finally, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 32.0 19.5258426966 164% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 33.0505617978 82% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 58.6224719101 99% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2412.0 2235.4752809 108% => OK
No of words: 447.0 442.535393258 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.39597315436 5.05705443957 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59808378696 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.10756373861 2.79657885939 111% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 215.323595506 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.476510067114 0.4932671777 97% => OK
syllable_count: 738.0 704.065955056 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 69.036452299 60.3974514979 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.857142857 118.986275619 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2857142857 23.4991977007 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.90476190476 5.21951772744 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 32.0 7.80617977528 410% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 10.2758426966 39% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.83258426966 248% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.190454388098 0.243740707755 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0645425638741 0.0831039109588 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0466167547901 0.0758088955206 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0917927473004 0.150359130593 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0542378131858 0.0667264976115 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 14.1392134831 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 48.8420337079 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.1743820225 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.04 12.1639044944 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.67 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 100.480337079 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.