Unfortunately, in contemporary society, creating an appealing image has become more important than the reality or truth behind that image. Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
In our current society, images are crucial factor for people as well as for companies. Although the importance of the images cannot be negligible, I adamantly believe that the reality is more important than image.
Granted, image would be one of the crucial factor especially for companies. There are numerous companies to invest a plethora of money to enhance their images. Milions of dollars tend to be invested in public relations and social responsibilities. If any companies ignore the importance of its image, it has an adverse impact on its sales. For example, Dorco is one of the company who deals with men's shaving tools. Even though it has been operated in Korea as a Korean company, people have misunderstood it as a Japaness company. It has made people reluctant to purchase its products whenever there has been some conflicts between two countries. If it priotized its image, their sale would not been hampered from any diplomatic issues. As seen in this compelling example, improving images for companies is most crucial element.
Regardless of the case above, for politicians, the most important factor is reality or truth rather than the image. Take Geun Hye Park, the former president of Korea, for exmple. Park was lionized many of the people once not only as a great leader and her purity but also as a daughter of a former great president. However, during her 4 years reign, people had found out her corruptions. She had have a non-politician advisor who had a myriad of powers, for instance, the power to appoint some major positions in government sectors and the power to make her daughter matriculate into one of the top universities in Korea. In addition, there was an illicit blacklist which impede any public activities of many artists. Her corruption led citizen to hold a mess candlelight vigils, and after all, she became the first president of Korea who was impeached from the presidency. Without revealing the truth, the life of politicians would not be persistent. Therefore, the most important thing for politicians is clearance.
In brief, I disagree on the statement that the image overrides the truth. In order to make a better society, any leader should prioritize their reality.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, so, therefore, well, after all, as for, for example, for instance, in addition, in brief, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 14.8657303371 40% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 33.0505617978 76% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 58.6224719101 75% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1851.0 2235.4752809 83% => OK
No of words: 369.0 442.535393258 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0162601626 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38284983912 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8091989812 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 215.323595506 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.555555555556 0.4932671777 113% => OK
syllable_count: 598.5 704.065955056 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 23.0359550562 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.334538548 60.3974514979 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.1363636364 118.986275619 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.7727272727 23.4991977007 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.95454545455 5.21951772744 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.13301353181 0.243740707755 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0427875484733 0.0831039109588 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0580271753819 0.0758088955206 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.104180616189 0.150359130593 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0478495238767 0.0667264976115 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 14.1392134831 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 48.8420337079 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.54 12.1639044944 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.71 8.38706741573 104% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 100.480337079 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 11.8971910112 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.2143820225 75% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.