Unfortunately, in contemporary society, creating an appealing image has become more important than the reality or truth behind that image
The claim that in the modern world, creating an appealing image has become more important than the reality or truth behind it is factually correct.
Our current society is extremely fast paced and this leaves little room for the people to show their true image. Showcasing our real intentions usually takes time and unfortunately, the current society simply does not give the chance to reveal ourselves. To give an example, interviewing for jobs usually takes an hour or two, but this time is not really enough for people to show their talent and people are judged based on their first impressions.
Moreover, due to social media and other technological advancements, people’s world has expanded and they are able to maintain a huge network of connections. Consequently, this gives people agency over how others perceive them and they are able to portray the best version of themselves. This can easily be seen in people’s social media accounts, where they put their best pictures or moments. They are able to edit or photoshop their pictures and this also puts pressure on the younger generation or people who are susceptible to do the same.
Our present society is too dynamic and the truth behind a person’s image has little importance compared to the previous generations. With technological advancements and therefore, raising standards puts immense pressure on people to put forward an appealing image of themselves. Therefore, the claim than creating an appealing image has become more important than the reality or truth behind that image is correct.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, consequently, first, moreover, really, so, therefore
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.5258426966 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 12.4196629213 8% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.3162921348 35% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 33.0505617978 73% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 58.6224719101 41% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 12.9106741573 15% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1316.0 2235.4752809 59% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 254.0 442.535393258 57% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1811023622 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.99216450694 4.55969084622 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77241399732 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 135.0 215.323595506 63% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.531496062992 0.4932671777 108% => OK
syllable_count: 410.4 704.065955056 58% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 20.2370786517 54% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 22.2383779657 60.3974514979 37% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 119.636363636 118.986275619 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0909090909 23.4991977007 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.63636363636 5.21951772744 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.339436788599 0.243740707755 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.161643416546 0.0831039109588 195% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.240116909502 0.0758088955206 317% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.30223423736 0.150359130593 201% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.276586652055 0.0667264976115 415% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 14.1392134831 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.8420337079 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.06 12.1639044944 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.94 8.38706741573 107% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 100.480337079 67% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.8971910112 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.