University education has become crucial for modern world since it enables new generations to compete with each other by using scientifc ground. In order to make the students to be able to improve themselves, balance between being strict and flexible should be considered carefully. With this importance, some argue that providing well-structured curriculum to the students have more impact on the end result than providing flexibility to the students. Since the immature nature of the young people obviously determine the choices of them, universities should guide the new generations by leading them to take required course instead of relaxing them to follow their pursuits. While it is tempted to think that the curriculums that have strict borders without any allowance leads to the success since they are designed by the professionals who are far away from emotional stimulies that the young generations usually fail to control, broadened vision provided to the students has more valuable impacts on the success.
Since the process of growing leisurely makes the students to be decisive about their goals and to be able to explore their capabilities, choices of the students are prompt to change according to their vision and perception of their personalities. Therefore, having a type of course program which doesn’t allow students to observe discrepant way of thinking existed in different kinds of fileds of study, prevents them to use their newly developed skills caused by modified personality although they are crucial to be in a track. In other words, forcing students to be headed in one way wouldn’t be helpful since their way of perception of the life changes according to time because of they are in the middle of process of growing. The designed way suggested by strict curriculum won’t be beneficial because the students will feel vanquished caused by adoptation problems. That is not to say, provide complete flexibility to the students since handing all of the controls to the immature individual will make the situation worsened becasue the students still need some level of guidance. However, all in all potential changes on the personality of the students should be considered while designing curriculum since their perception of the world may result in new sets of skills required to be implemented on the process of learning
At the same time, broadened curriculum that doesn’t have strictly shaped borders also carries the nature of leading the student in a position that they will have less skills to compete with the others. Since technical background of the field requires a lot of time and huge amount of effort, providing courses not included in the major filed would obviously produce less capable students. In other words, since the resources required to digging into the deeper levels of the technical knowledge required to be professional on the major field are devoted to the courses that doesn’t help students to improve themselves on the field, future life of the new generations will be harder. However, if a student can be able to gain fundemental competences with the help of the core courses provided also in the broadened curriculum, developing their skills would be easier for them. For instance, if the student who is studying on computer science is able to learn how to construct algorithm, she would improve herself by researching or practicing at the industry without needing to take higher level course from the university.
Though many feel that the strict rules applied by the universities will definitely lead us to be successful, they miss the point that the success is a personal fact. Instead, the curriculum which provides different approaches helps student to implement their new sets of skills born thanks to their personality change. To think otherwise is to forget the main factors that helps us to be triumphant.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 674, Rule ID: BECAUSE_OF_I[1]
Message: Probable usage error. Use 'because they' instead.
Suggestion: because they
...n of the life changes according to time because of they are in the middle of process of growing...
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Line 2, column 951, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...exibility to the students since handing all of the controls to the immature individual wil...
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Line 3, column 163, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun skills is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...udent in a position that they will have less skills to compete with the others. Sinc...
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Line 4, column 8, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun feel seems to be countable; consider using: 'many feels'.
Suggestion: many feels
...el course from the university. Though many feel that the strict rules applied by the un...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, may, so, still, therefore, well, while, for instance, in fact, of course, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 19.5258426966 149% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 14.8657303371 34% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 33.0505617978 124% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 119.0 58.6224719101 203% => Less preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3260.0 2235.4752809 146% => OK
No of words: 628.0 442.535393258 142% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.19108280255 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.00598923014 4.55969084622 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79388135999 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 282.0 215.323595506 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.449044585987 0.4932671777 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1002.6 704.065955056 142% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.10617977528 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.38483146067 228% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 34.0 23.0359550562 148% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 84.2556551936 60.3974514979 140% => OK
Chars per sentence: 181.111111111 118.986275619 152% => OK
Words per sentence: 34.8888888889 23.4991977007 148% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.94444444444 5.21951772744 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.208614976895 0.243740707755 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0773006016484 0.0831039109588 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0331451542724 0.0758088955206 44% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.136300373762 0.150359130593 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0311158380982 0.0667264976115 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.5 14.1392134831 145% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.97 48.8420337079 76% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.6 12.1743820225 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.41 12.1639044944 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.07 8.38706741573 108% => OK
difficult_words: 149.0 100.480337079 148% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 11.8971910112 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.6 11.2143820225 139% => OK
text_standard: 21.0 11.7820224719 178% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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