The author stated that the video recording is far more superior than the written records in modern world. I think that written records are more useful than the video recording.
There are many things that cannot be depicted by video recordings such as line of thoughts and imagination. By no means has anyone can video record his thinking. The greatest philosophers of the past such as Einstein, Newton and many more had given their theories in the form of documentation. Many of the inventions and discoveries from which we are surrounded with is because of these written records which we got from the thinkers of the past. The theory of relativity by Einstein, gravitational law by Newton and law of planetary motion by Kaplan were well documented by these great thinkers of the past. The thought process is an intangible thing so it cannot be recorded by video. In the research work, one has to write his reasoning behind the experiments and without documentation it is not possible.
Basically, we cannot imagine our life without documentation. Mathematical equations, complex law agreements and research work can only be documented. The books on various subjects such as science, mathematics, philosophies are preserved only due to documentation. The voluminous information provided on the internet to our driving license are all documented.
Nonetheless, there are many things that can only be depicted properly in form of video like wedding, birthday parties. The documentation of these things is meaningless. Similarly, the beauty of nature such as animals, plants and landscape can only be well represented by video recording. It is not possible to describe a lion to anyone who has not seen it. The liveliness of natural events such as volcanic eruption, cyclones and hurricanes can be represented properly by video recording.
To sum up, all of the things can be documented, though not as clear as video recording in some cases, we are helpless without documentation. The things which we can think, we can write. So there is no limitto documentation.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 51, Rule ID: SUPERIOR_THAN[2]
Message: The adjective more is normally used with to and does not need 'more' (so called implicit comparative). Probably you need to write: 'superior to'.
Suggestion: superior to
... stated that the video recording is far more superior than the written records in modern world. I ...
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Line 7, column 361, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... lion to anyone who has not seen it. The liveliness of natural events such as vol...
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Line 9, column 12, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...perly by video recording. To sum up, all of the things can be documented, though not as...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, nonetheless, similarly, so, well, as to, i think, such as, in some cases, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.5258426966 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 14.8657303371 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 33.0505617978 70% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 58.6224719101 82% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1739.0 2235.4752809 78% => OK
No of words: 337.0 442.535393258 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.16023738872 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28457229495 4.55969084622 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04961655549 2.79657885939 109% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 215.323595506 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.489614243323 0.4932671777 99% => OK
syllable_count: 543.6 704.065955056 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 10.0 4.99550561798 200% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 23.0359550562 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.0601035184 60.3974514979 60% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 82.8095238095 118.986275619 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0476190476 23.4991977007 68% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.14285714286 5.21951772744 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.83258426966 186% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.215132905492 0.243740707755 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0708951088885 0.0831039109588 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0682889782024 0.0758088955206 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.130291111932 0.150359130593 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0941272604355 0.0667264976115 141% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 14.1392134831 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 48.8420337079 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.35 12.1639044944 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.04 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 100.480337079 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.2143820225 75% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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