As we acquire more knowledge, things do not become more comprehensible, but more complex and mysterious.
The statement that acquiring profound knowledge increases the complexity in place of making it easy and understandable. The statement here is controversial one. Taking into account the depth of any subject, anyone who master's a complete subject or gains depth knowledge of that field would have complete and unambiguos understanding of that field. As a general rule nothing in this world has a finish line. One who has mastered the subject is the one who would try to uncover new things and would try to discover new facet of that field. So the statement given can be thought of as half correct. Things become comprehensible but not complex or mysterious.
Firstly, as a novice, things would be complex and mysterious, but as one gain knowledge and infomation about that particular field it becomes easy to move on. And in turn as one goes in depth the breadth of the field increases and not the complexity. For example, the discovery of telephone has solved the problem of distance. Previously people needed to wait for more than a month to receive and send information using conventional systems, but this invention has made things simple.
Secondly, things become simple and accurate. For example the invention of GPS. Previously airplanes and ships were dependent mostly on the position of sun and stars and the compass. And anytime in the middle of journey if a ship encounters cloudy weather, some natural disaster or the compass stops working because of varying magnetic field, then the survival of the ship would be at the mercy of sea. On the same line the discovery of internet has increased the spread of knowlege. With this invention the complexity of going to educational institution, attend physical class, waste time on transportation has been overcomed and a common platform for all learners which has a variety of knowledge and offers the learner, flexibility to learn at its pace and time.
In sum, the discovery of telephone and GPS has made life simple and less complex and in turn has increased the reliability and effectiveness of human's work and time. As more such knowledge gets uncovered things would become more simple and reliable.
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- The sense of humor is one of the most important human qualities. Do you agree or disagree with the statement? 90
- College students should base their choice of a field of study on the availability of jobs in that field. 58
- Advances in transportation and communication like the airplane and telephone have changed the way that nations interact with each other in a global society. chose another technological that you think that is important. Give specific reasons for your choic 83
- Theories about risk-taking personality 73
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 349, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...unambiguos understanding of that field. As a general rule nothing in this world ha...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, then, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 19.5258426966 36% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 28.0 14.8657303371 188% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 11.0 33.0505617978 33% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 58.6224719101 73% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1809.0 2235.4752809 81% => OK
No of words: 361.0 442.535393258 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01108033241 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35889894354 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80764833511 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 215.323595506 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.523545706371 0.4932671777 106% => OK
syllable_count: 560.7 704.065955056 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 6.24550561798 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 65.4453314816 60.3974514979 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.2105263158 118.986275619 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0 23.4991977007 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.36842105263 5.21951772744 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 10.2758426966 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.83258426966 207% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.186962377409 0.243740707755 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0625754646954 0.0831039109588 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.101883493663 0.0758088955206 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132254537619 0.150359130593 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0805541820121 0.0667264976115 121% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 14.1392134831 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.8420337079 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 12.1639044944 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.99 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 100.480337079 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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