The well-being of a society is closely associated with the energy and liveliness level, indicators of benevolent social environments that allow freedom of speech. Silence and fear when speaking publicly signal the unhealthy relationship between the authority and the public, in the sense that individuals fear the consequences of direct impeachment and the government is insecure of its efficacy to silence any opposing view. In my opinion, a society can be enhanced when people freely express their concerns to the authority because it symbolize a healthy relationship .
The opposing side might recognize the adversity of the freedom, mainly the abuse of freedom. The statement gives a specific condition that when many of its people question authority, is it beneficial to the society? Such phrasing might incur a bad image of the vast majority hold opinions against the authority , indicating the ineffectiveness of the incumbent officials. Especially this office has no response to the many objections , but to passively allow such situations to continue. However, only when the authority has become transparent on its policies and plan that put them in a vulnerable position open to criticism. A secretive authority only disclosing distorted figures and numbers leave no room for supervision. Comparing with darkness, transparency can prevent corruption, add on censorship to the executives and educate the public with the mechanisms of government. The benefits of allowing censorship, acting like a protective shield of society, outweigh the possibility of extreme situations when the authority disregards all criticism.
The more people engage in conversation of public affairs, the more voices conjugate, the deeper understanding of public’s concerns and attitudes. It is also beneficial for the authority itself to receive questions, worries, disapprovals from the public. Not to be confused with submitting to public opinions, the authority can select, filter and analyze first-hand materials of citizens to design better strategy and policies. To intake public opinions should not be equate to subdue under public pressure, governments can view it as a source of information as a practical and useful tool. Since the healthy feedback can enhance the performance of authorities, it is beneficial loop for the entire society to create policies fitted to public’s needs.
Lastly, public criticisms can be a great way to hear voices from minorities, who are underrepresented in populations. Their concerns and problems are usually neglected by their weakness in current democracy system applying “the rule of majority”. Due to the way of legislature is composed, minority benefits require a long and arduous process to be understand and acknowledge by the public , not to mentions to ask for concessions from the privileged majority . The channel of direct communication between the minority and the authority, although not fundamentally establishing a system to protect minority benefits, leads to a more equal society.
- Claim: Nations should suspend government funding for the arts when significant numbers of their citizens are hungry or unemployed.Reason: It is inappropriate—and, perhaps, even cruel—to use public resources to fund the arts when people's basic needs a 75
- The well-being of a society is enhanced when many of its people question authority.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and s 66
- Some people believe that in order to be effective, political leaders must yield to public opinion and abandon principle for the sake of compromise. Others believe that the most essential quality of an effective leader is the ability to remain consistently 58
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, lastly, so, well, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 33.0505617978 57% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 58.6224719101 116% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2594.0 2235.4752809 116% => OK
No of words: 461.0 442.535393258 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.62689804772 5.05705443957 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63367139033 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.2340330222 2.79657885939 116% => OK
Unique words: 253.0 215.323595506 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.548806941432 0.4932671777 111% => OK
syllable_count: 834.3 704.065955056 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59117977528 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 12.0 4.99550561798 240% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.5567946123 60.3974514979 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.7 118.986275619 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.05 23.4991977007 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.1 5.21951772744 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 32.0 7.80617977528 410% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.139383491982 0.243740707755 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0462873442886 0.0831039109588 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0535918667177 0.0758088955206 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0855286287088 0.150359130593 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0392067432537 0.0667264976115 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 14.1392134831 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 31.21 48.8420337079 64% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.1743820225 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.67 12.1639044944 129% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.22 8.38706741573 122% => OK
difficult_words: 159.0 100.480337079 158% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 16.0 11.8971910112 134% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 11.7820224719 136% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.