What matters to you. And why?
I still have a vivid memory when I first stepped into one of the most prestigious colleges in Ho Chi Minh City – Foreign Trade University. At that time, I believed accumulating sufficient knowledge and obtaining good skills is a must which can offer me a large window of employment opportunities with expected salaries and other benefits in the future. So, I have to be perfect at those two things. Back then, what really concerned me was how to achieve good grades or what extracurricular I should engage in. After three years, now I reflect on what has been done so far and realize everything is different from what I thought it should have been.
Regarding an ongoing internship, I was exposed to many novelties and inevitable failures due to my rigid performance based on hypothetical groundings. However, after failures come valuable lessons. At first, giving a mechanical response to the assigned tasks had impeded my comprehensibility to the essence value of the job; then, I myself strove to observe and perceive learning attitude or respect towards surroundings plays a pivotal role. From then, I could notice how my working life has changed day by day thanks to my proactive behaviour. Also, more added values are created for myself and other people with my can – do attitude. Therefore, this led to higher efficiency and much faster-paced workplace.
Undeniably, life does not just revolve around studying and practicing – this is what I learned from the 3 – month internship. It is apparent knowledge and skills may support you at some phases, but attitudes promote lifetime improvements. Thus, instead of relying too much on theoretical understandings, I would reckon our rising generation should pay more attention to pragmatic guide. When adopting humble and enthusiastic attitude in academic environment, I could acknowledge how positively my friends were influenced through my consistent making effort. Hence, I wholeheartedly believe this change will be conducive to self – development and community, especially in a workplace where people often label it “stiff competition”.
In this day and age, most enterprises seem to appreciate staff’s attitude rather than their understandings or skills. After the exposure to a practical job, I sincerely consent to this mindset due to its contribution to work values. As a result, I as well as my peers have to figure out how to suit this trend since a minor change in attitude can entail a significant result.
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| 2017-06-28 | baomap22000 | 16 | view |
- What matters to you. And why? 11
- What matters to you. And why? 16
- Given the high unemployment rate, it is recommended that the government only provide primary education and no secondary education. To what extend do you agree or disagree? 89
- Do you think it is better to send criminals to prison or let them receive education or job trainings? 84
- Some people believe that parents should be obliged to immunize their children against childhood disease. However, others think that individuals have the right to choose not to immunize their children. Discuss both views and give your opinion. 89
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, may, really, regarding, so, still, then, therefore, thus, well, as a result, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.5258426966 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.3162921348 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 43.0 33.0505617978 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 58.6224719101 87% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2100.0 2235.4752809 94% => OK
No of words: 405.0 442.535393258 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.18518518519 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48604634366 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.16040316228 2.79657885939 113% => OK
Unique words: 264.0 215.323595506 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.651851851852 0.4932671777 132% => OK
syllable_count: 663.3 704.065955056 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 6.24550561798 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Interrogative: 2.0 0.740449438202 270% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.38483146067 205% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.3692627018 60.3974514979 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.526315789 118.986275619 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3157894737 23.4991977007 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.57894736842 5.21951772744 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0738104035566 0.243740707755 30% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.021211149256 0.0831039109588 26% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0428331265122 0.0758088955206 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0411247203177 0.150359130593 27% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0439096928721 0.0667264976115 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 14.1392134831 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.8420337079 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 12.1639044944 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.43 8.38706741573 112% => OK
difficult_words: 122.0 100.480337079 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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