The charts below show infrmation about honey-bee colonies and honey production in the US.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The both of chart give information about the number of honey colonies and how much honey produces between 1970 and 2010.
Bee colonies in 1970, there were 4, 000, 000 colonies in the United States. In 1980, this rose to approximately 4, 200, 000. Although they were increase for 10 years after that over the next 30 years honey-bee decrease by about millions every ten years with the result that in 2010, there were about 1, 800, 000 colonies left.
During the same period, production honey in the United State for 1970 until 2010 were fluctuations. We showed that chart in 1970 US honey produce 130,000 tons after that the colonies produced dropped to 110, 000. In the next ten years, honey production rose to 120, 000 tons. However, over the next 20 years the number decreased a lot of 70, 000 tons in the 2010 whereas before 100.000 tons in 2000.
In the conclusion, the chart show that both the number of colonies and honey produced unchanged for 40 years. The relationship is not an exact are because colonies go up approximately 4, 2 million but the honey production decrease about 110, 000 tons in 1980.
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Sentence: Although they were increase for 10 years after that over the next 30 years honey-bee decrease by about millions every ten years with the result that in 2010, there were about 1, 800, 000 colonies left.
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Sentence: We showed that chart in 1970 US honey produce 130,000 tons after that the colonies produced dropped to 110, 000.
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Sentence: In the conclusion, the chart show that both the number of colonies and honey produced unchanged for 40 years.
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