Children s leisure activities must entirely be educational To what extent do you agree or disagree Give example with view

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Children's leisure activities must entirely be educational.To what extent do you agree or disagree.Give example with view.

It is a well known fact that"All works and no play makes a jack dull boy".If children's leisure activities are academic oriented,they will detest their study.Therefore,I would probably oppose the idea of it.

To begin with,in the past,children used to spend a lot of time with their peer groups and the concept of play school and creche did not exist,however,nowadays,in the cut-throat competition and the rat race,parents bundle off their children toward study when they are toddlers,due to this reason,children live stressful life.Moreover,they suffer from many ailments in childhood age if they ...

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Sentence: Hencemore, children must perform in sports and games because it inculcate moral ethics in a person such as confidence, spirit of emulation, brotherhood and many more which further help in their future.
Description: A pronoun, personal, nominative, 3rd person singular is not usually followed by a noun, singular, common
Suggestion: Refer to it and inculcate

Sentence: Moreover, they say it enable's the children to learn good manners which is lucrative for their survival.
Description: The tag a noun, singular, proper, genitive is not usually followed by the
Suggestion: Refer to enable's and the
Description: The fragment good manners which is not usually followed by is
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace is with are

Sentence: To begin with, in the past, children used to spend a lot of time with their peer groups and the concept of play school and creche did not exist, however, nowadays, in the cut-throat competition and the rat race, parents bundle off their children toward study when they are toddlers, due to this reason, children live stressful life.
Error: creche Suggestion: ?

Sentence: For instance, they must provide them puzzal, blocks and so on.
Error: puzzal Suggestion: puzzle

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Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.047 0.07

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Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
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No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 303 350
No. of Characters: 1487 1500
No. of Different Words: 186 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.172 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.908 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.523 2.4
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No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 77 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 55 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 31 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.2 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 13.848 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.733 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.281 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.543 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.047 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5