Current tobacco use among middle and high school students

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Current tobacco use among middle and high school students

This bar chart shows the percentage of American students particularly middle and high school who use different kinds of tobacco products.

This chart illustrates that high school apprentices totally use tobacco about three times more than secondary school pupils. About 26 percent of high school students use cigarettes in compare with middle school pupils by 8 percent. The consumption percentage of pipes, bidis and kreteks among younger pupils are 2 times less than older ones approximately. About 6 percent of high school undrgraduates are smokeless although this amount for secondary learners is 3 percent. According to the chart, the number of high school tobacco users are more than middle users in various kinds of smoking.

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Sentence: About 26 percent of high school students use cigarettes in compare with middle school pupils by 8 percent.
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Sentence: About 6 percent of high school undrgraduates are smokeless although this amount for secondary learners is 3 percent.
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