Does modern technology make life more convenient or was life better when technology was simpler To what extent do you support Give your reason

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Does modern technology make life more convenient, or was life better when technology was simpler? To what extent do you support? Give your reason.

Since modern technologies present in this world, people's lives are more comfortable. However, live of societies are better when technology was ordinary.
Apropos to Media Indonesia, numerous inhabitants feel preferable when their life without modern technology. Hand phone is one of modern technology which build personality of people far each other. They prefer to call each one with this device than talk face-to-face. They reckon that do not need extend time to connect with their relative in order they simply need a brief time to contact the other. In past, people were closer each other due to...

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Sentence: Since modern technology present in this world, people life more comfortable.
Suggestion: Since modern technologies present in this world, people's lives are more comfortable.

Sentence: In past, people were closer each other due to they had to interact directly if they needed some assistance.
Suggestion: don't put a sentence after 'due to'

Sentence: As a result, citizen who life in old days are more appreciate each other than now.
Description: A WH-pronoun, nominative is not usually followed by a noun, singular, common
Suggestion: Refer to who and life

Sentence: Nevertheless, the previous statement are rather dubious where modern technology creates youth generation's life easier because they could find information and share it in brief time.
Description: The fragment the previous statement is not usually followed by are
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace are with is

Sentence: In conclusion, high technology is very important for society at present due to it creates their life more convenient.
Description: The fragment it creates their is rare
Suggestion: don't put a sentence after 'due to'

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Sentence Length SD: 4.489 7.5

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Score: 6.0 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 324 350
No. of Characters: 1612 1500
No. of Different Words: 162 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.243 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.975 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.438 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 99 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 72 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 49 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 32 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.053 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 4.489 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.526 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.321 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.507 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.136 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5