In the last 20 years there have been significant developments in the field of information technology (IT). For example the world wide web and communication by email. However, future developments in IT are likely to have more negative effects than positive.
To what extent do you agree with this view?
More than of two decades, people involve with IT in all of the world. IT has changed people life and form of communications. However , this technology has been positive achievements, but it also has some negative effects. (However , this technology had positive achievements since first, , but it also has some negative effects).
Nowadays world population is increasing. Therefore, this problem cause rising communications. Despite the long distances, occasionally it 's better to share some information through internet. People send their information via email and receive them by email too. So IT has created easier life for people. In the other word, people can stay at home and do their business by this technology.
On the other hand people forget tradition ways of communications. For example, they don’t write letter for each other and they don 't go shopping, because they buy some things through E-stores (Electronic stores). Therefore social relations reduce. Even, some schools or universities, hold their classes through internet (Virtual education). So students can 't see each other. Sometimes, students even don 't buy book from book store and they don 't go to library. In some countries, children don 't write and they forget writing. There are also some web sites that don 't have suitable content and affect to children manner and adult manner too. So these web sites influence on society.
As a result, however , this technology has some bad effects, but can 't prevent from it 's advance. Totally, developments and technology always have bad and good effects but best job is management that. If IT is lead to right way, good effects are more than bad effects. Therefore a correct and accurate management, prevent from any hurt. Because technology is essential for life quality improvement. Finally I can say the world wide web and communication by email and the internet facilitate communications.
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However , this technology has been positive achievements, but it also has some negative effects. (However , this technology had positive achievements since first, , but it also has some negative effects).
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