In many parts of the world, children’s lives were very different from today.
What do you think were the advantages and disadvantages of life for children in the past?
In several areas of the earth, the existence of kids were particularly unusual from this period. Although some people believe it has benefits, I think there are some negative effects that should be considered.
There were several disadvantages of young people’s living in several ways from today. Firstly, they enjoyed unsafe activities such as: climbing trees and swimming in the pool. As a result, they found some problems which are difficult to solve by themselves. Secondly, walking from academy to home was preferable rather than being carried in their parent’s automobile. Sometimes, they forgot the road that they should pass. As a result, it was a big problem for them.
On the contrary, the different young people’s living in the past had some advantages from today. With the first advantage, children spent spare time to play out of their home with other junior who lived closely. This taught them to live together with other people at the same age. The second benefit was the young students should not be under pressure to get the high score at school. This made them more relax in their studying and brought them to their best ability at school.
In my opinion, another advantage was the children spent more time with their parents and relatives than with babysitters. It influenced them to have more knowledge how to communicate well with the other family members. Also, it gave positive results for their relationship each other.
In a nutshell, the differences of the young people’s living have both of positive and negative effects. I think parents should give more attention to their young generations. As a result, they will get more positive effects.
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