Nations should suspend government funding for the arts when significant number of their citizens are hungry or unemployed.
Nation is a large group of people. Whenever there is large group, all the individuals in that group can't be equal. Some would have more then their needs, some would have sufficient resources and some needy people would also be there. Every nation has such issues but the ratio of the three types would vary. On the other hand arts is the field which has been patronized from the times of kings, which can be studied in the history.
People who have more then their needs would always have time which would be utilized in the areas like sports and arts. But the destitute's time goes in earning his livelihood onlt, so would feel arts as waste of money. it is not correct in any sense to suspend funds for the arts because it brings fame and name as well as monetary funds to the nation from all across the globe. A nation without any arts is like a house without decoration. Because whenever we study history of any dynasty, one of the important feature is arts. so for the growth of human civilisation arts is very important.
But government funds for the arts must be critically checked and should not be funded in excess if most of the citizens of any nation are hungry, i.e. each penny should be spent and utilised with utter care. there should be some criteria made which would define adequete government funding for arts. In every nation government has programs to remove poverty which should be made effective rather then suspending the funds for other fields like arts.
Sentence: But the destitute's time goes in earning his livelihood onlt, so would feel arts as waste of money. it is not correct in any sense to suspend funds for the arts because it brings fame and name as well as monetary funds to the nation from all across the globe.
Error: onlt Suggestion: only
Sentence: Because whenever we study history of any dynasty, one of the important feature is arts. so for the growth of human civilisation arts is very important.
Error: civilisation Suggestion: civilization
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