Some animal species such as dinosaurs and dodos become extinct because of natural process. So it is not necessary to try and prevent this from happening. Do you agree or disagree?

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Some animal species such as dinosaurs and dodos become extinct because of natural process. So it is not necessary to try and prevent this from happening. Do you agree or disagree?

Animal species are extinct due to several reasons. Some people feel that these are and mostly end up as a part natural process and men cannot present it. However, I am totally disagreeing with this view due to a number of reasons, which I will explore in my essay.

Animals are extinct by extreme climates breaking up of ecosystem and natural disasters. Firstly, climatic extremes are resulting from global warming. The extreme heat leads to drought and some animals and plants die out. It may further results in wild fire and a large part of animal habitat burned up, inevitably dying of rare plan...

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Sentence: In this planet, each animals and plants are interconnected and helps to maintain the equilibrium of the earth.
Description: A determiner/pronoun, singular is not usually followed by a noun, plural, common
Suggestion: Refer to each and animals

Sentence: However, it we look behind and analyses deeply, it can be reveal that human are responsible to all to an extent.
Description: A pronoun, personal, nominative, 3rd person singular is not usually followed by a pronoun, personal, nominative, not 3rd person singular
Suggestion: Refer to it and we

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Sir...
Thanks for the correction..

The first one..
All creatures in this world are interconnected and..

The second one...sorry....it is a typing mistake..

however, if we look...

Thanks...
Tessy

hai Sir...

There is no secret in the writing...

You should try to gain speed in writing..for that choose small paragraphs and write down..

Read more and more...try to Co relate topics..for example before witing the essay, you should read the related essays..

While reading write down good sentances...
Use it according to the condition..
That is why my essays some sentances are repeating..the examiner reading our one essay so he dodnt know we used it in any other essays...

I tried use that link but confused...

So please and paste it there..or copy paste...

thanks a lot..
Tessy

Hi Tessy,

here are my comments

Some people feel that these are and mostly end up as a part natural process and men cannot present it --> Something wrong in this sentence

It may further results in wild fire --> I hope it should be "forest fire".

the very low grade temperature effects animal life span. --> It should be "affects the animal life"

To withstand with this very law temperature is very difficult. --> I hope there is typo error "law" instead of "low"

you can write the above sentence as " For animals to survive under this extremely low temperature is a paramount "

Few more points about Global warming:

Global warming is the cause of emission of carbon dioxide and sulphur dioxide into atmosphere from manufacturing industries and factories which it runs affects the earth's ecosystem immensely.

The cutting and removal of large quantities of plants and animals cause disturbance to the easy life of all. --> I feel there is no effective vocabulary in this sentence.

The huge destruction made on the animal and plant life adversely affect the human living too.