Some parents control their children from a very young age and others give freedom to their children. What are the advantages and disadvantages of both approaches? Give your own opinion.
In the past two decades people's lives style has been changed too much. One of these changes is the way we behavior with our children. In the past people believe they must have restricted role and control their children, But there are many people who don’t agree. They argue that they should better give freedom to their children.
It is clear that control children have its advantages and disadvantages. First advantages are you probably know everything about your child. For example, where is he or she right known, who is her or his friend and so on? Secondly, people believe they control their child because for their goodness. Their children do not have enough experience and do not have enough info about everything, so this is parent's responsibilities to take care of them.
The most clearly disadvantages of this idea is children mostly become poor and they are depended on their parents. Unfortunately, we see more examples of these children in our society, even though we they grow up, they can make a decision without their parents. Another disadvantages is the children who are grown up with this idea, in the most time have some psychology problem such as they cannot comminute easily with other people.
On the other hand, the next approach also has both good and bad sides. When we give freedom to our children, we allow them to experience external world by themselves so they can gain a lot of experience. However, we can deny this fact that gain experience is costly and parents should be aware of this unknown costly.
To sum up, from a personal perspective, I prefer to be more moderated. I believe we should have some control roles and meanwhile we must to give some freedom to their children. In fact it must be a balance between these approaches.
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Sentence: One of these changes is the way we behavior with our children.
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Sentence: The most clearly disadvantages of this idea is children mostly become poor and they are depended on their parents.
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Sentence: Unfortunately, we see more examples of these children in our society, even though we they grow up, they can make a decision without their parents.
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Sentence: Another disadvantages is the children who are grown up with this idea, in the most time have some psychology problem such as they cannot comminute easily with other people.
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Sentence: Another disadvantages is the children who are grown up with this idea, in the most time have some psychology problem such as they cannot comminute easily with other people.
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