Some people regard work as the most important thing in life and have little interest in anything else. Other people are more enthusiastic about their hobbies and leisure interests than their jobs.

Although, work is an essential element for sustenance, people should be enthusiastic about their hobbies and leisure apart from their jobs. In my opinion, both are equally important and should not trample the other one. A fine work life balance is an essential ingredient for an overall success.

For instance, people who regard work as a priority lose a major part of their life in office. We as human beings have once in a life time opportunity to enjoy the beauty of this world. Nowadays, there are so many activities to perform, that every individual has a variety of choices for them to choos...

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Sentence: Additionally, hobbies brings out a lot of creativity within the individual.
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