Some people support generous benefits for workers such as high wages, long-term pensions, and comprehensive medical coverage. Others believe that such benefits are impractical. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

Sentence: As a result the share value will drop, no money will be their for new projects, and thus it ultimatily ruin the company.
Description: The tag a determiner, possessive is not usually followed by for
Suggestion: Refer to their and for

Sentence: Employers may forced to cut down the wages, tighten the staff strength, and reduce the production.
Description: A modal auxillary is not usually followed by a verb, past participle
Suggestion: Refer to may and forced

Sentence: In this current period of economic crisis, giving generous long term benefits to employees become a contraversial issue.
Error: contraversial Suggestion: controversial

Sentence: It not only provides job satisfaction, but also gives the necessory financial support to employees and their dependents.
Error: necessory Suggestion: necessary

Sentence: All these activities will boost the economy and benefical for all.
Error: benefical Suggestion: beneficial

Sentence: To compensate with that the product become more costive.
Error: costive Suggestion: No alternate word

Sentence: It further negatively effect the financical gain.
Error: financical Suggestion: financial

Sentence: As a result the share value will drop, no money will be their for new projects, and thus it ultimatily ruin the company.
Error: ultimatily Suggestion: ultimately

Sentence: By all these ways, the frim can use brillient employees and make more profit.
Error: brillient Suggestion: brilliant
Error: frim Suggestion: firm

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No. of Spelling Errors: 8 2
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.244 0.35

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Score: 7.5 out of 9 (The essay can get mark over 8.0 without spelling errors)
Category: Very Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 8 2
No. of Sentences: 27 15
No. of Words: 419 350
No. of Characters: 2111 1500
No. of Different Words: 227 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.524 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.038 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.697 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 152 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 120 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 89 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 62 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 15.519 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.138 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.444 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.244 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.44 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.07 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5

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