Televised talent shows have become popular in many societies today. Are these shows good method of finding talented people, or are they just entertainment?
Give reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Today, TFPA (Television Favorite Program Award) foundations grant talent shows as the most favorite program television in the world. Majority countries in the world have talent shows program in their local television. Thus program become popular because many people believe that it is good ways to get fabulous talent from finding talented people. From broadcasting industry, the program cause more benefits for the company. Refer to those phenomena, this essay will argue whether the talent performance is the best way to look for talented people or they are just entertainment.
In many countries today, we can seeing talent shows programs in televisions for example we can watch Indonesian idol in Indonesia, American got talent in America, Japanese star look in Japan and many more. The program is the best technique to finding talented people in each country, because all citizens can participate in these programs, for instance, in Indonesia all residents can apply for Indonesian idol even residents come from remote area. It means all people have chance to be famous with their talent.
On other hand, main purpose of the program just for entertainment and get more benefits from sponsor. Tifatul Sembiring, communication minister of Republic of Indonesia, explain that talent shows program in television just for entertainment purpose, majority goals of talent shows program in television are not finding talented people but just for entertainment and television needed. Accordingly, talent shows have not given more change to talented humans, because oriented of the program is entertainment and find more benefits from sponsor. Argument of Tifatul Sembiring is refer to research of University of Indonesia, the result argue that “majority talent shows programs in Indonesia just for entertainment”.
Evidently, the purpose of talent shows programs is look for citizens who have incredible talent, besides the program became good entertainment because viewers feels like watch themselves when they watch talent shows program. The reasons probably cause talent shows looks like program with entertainment purpose only.
To conclude, skill presents program is good ways to hunting citizen who have extra-ordinary talent. Hence everyone can present their ability, and become familiar when he winning the competition, citizens who have extraordinary talents would get more benefits from thus program. Besides, television companies are also get vantages from the program. Because a lot participants who apply for the talent shows, it would produce a good program in entertainment.
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