We no longer need to have animal kept in zoos. So zoo should be closed. Do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays since many peoples have realised how are important to keep maintaining stability of nature by protecting wild animal, the function of zoo is to protecting all kind of animals are being reviewed. Zoo still should be opened with a different function such as for learning and also prevent the special animals going extinct.
Firstly, even tought many nation has consider about how important the nature are, as the reasons for sience and as the education for young generation, zoo must keep on operating. As we know maybe some middle size animal are very easily to meet each day such as cat, dog, birds, and many more. But a big animal such as elephant, lion, tiger and others are kind of animal that can not be sight oftenly in everywhere. That is why the zoo are needed, we do not have to go to africa to see and learn how the lion life and also we do not have to go to arctic to see penguin.
Secondly, zoo also play an important role in order to protecting animal near extinction such as panda, elephant, tiger, panther and a few kind of birds. As we know many wild hunter are still hunting wild animal for their hobbies. Life of elephant and lion are considerably dangerous if this keep on going. Stability of nature will broken and this will lead to food chain circle and this extremely dangerous for the next human generation.
However, even the development of zoo business keep growth relatively stable, many scientists in nature and also animals lover argue that animals should be live free in their basic habbitat. Prevent hunter by ban all kind of gun will conduct peacefully atmosphere. Establish several jungle cop post also will support well enough.
Finally, by the reasons to protecting animals from extinction and for young generation knowledge, zoo must keep exsist. Zoo also will provides animals with save environment.
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Nowadays since many peoples have realised how are important to keep maintaining stability of nature by protecting wild animal, the function of zoo is to protecting all kind of animals are being reviewed.
Suggestion: Can you re-write this sentence? A lot of errors.
Zoo still should be opened with a different function such as for learning and also prevent the special animals going extinct.
Zoo still should be opened with a different function such as for learning and also preventing the special animals going extinct.
Sentence: Firstly, even tought many nation has consider about how important the nature are, as the reasons for sience and as the education for young generation, zoo must keep on operating.
Description: A verb 'to have', present tense, 3rd person singular is not usually followed by a verb, base: uninflected present, imperative or infinitive
Suggestion: Refer to has and consider
some middle size animal are very easily to meet each day
some middle size animals are very easily to meet each day
Sentence: Prevent hunter by ban all kind of gun will conduct peacefully atmosphere.
Description: The fragment by ban all is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace ban with adverb
Sentence: Zoo also will provides animals with save environment.
Description: A modal auxillary is not usually followed by a verb, present tense, 3rd person singular
Suggestion: Refer to will and provides
Sentence: Nowadays since many peoples have realised how are important to keep maintaining stability of nature by protecting wild animal, the function of zoo is to protecting all kind of animals are being reviewed.
Error: realised Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: Firstly, even tought many nation has consider about how important the nature are, as the reasons for sience and as the education for young generation, zoo must keep on operating.
Error: sience Suggestion: since
Error: tought Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: But a big animal such as elephant, lion, tiger and others are kind of animal that can not be sight oftenly in everywhere.
Error: oftenly Suggestion: often
Sentence: That is why the zoo are needed, we do not have to go to africa to see and learn how the lion life and also we do not have to go to arctic to see penguin.
Error: africa Suggestion: affect
Sentence: However, even the development of zoo business keep growth relatively stable, many scientists in nature and also animals lover argue that animals should be live free in their basic habbitat.
Error: habbitat Suggestion: habitat
Sentence: Finally, by the reasons to protecting animals from extinction and for young generation knowledge, zoo must keep exsist.
Error: exsist Suggestion: exist
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Score: 5.0 out of 9
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 7 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 8 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 319 350
No. of Characters: 1488 1500
No. of Different Words: 164 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.226 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.665 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.371 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 100 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 69 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 45 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 31 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.267 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.394 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.933 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.343 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.584 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.084 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5