When people move to another country, some of them decide to follow the customs of the new country.
Others prefer to keep their own customs. Compare these two choices.
Which one do you prefer? Support your answer with specific details.
As the world embraces globalization, countries worldwide are opening their doors to migrants. While some of these individuals choose to blend into their country of adoption, others remain attached to the values and traditions of their ancestors. Both choices entail pros and cons as discussed below.
On one side, remaining true to one’s own culture is paramount in preserving one’s identity. This particularly applies to those born in the countries where their parents and grandparents moved to. Hence, while they are recognized as a citizen of that country and fully embrace its customs as th...
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