you are going to study in a college in the UK next year. You would like to stay in a college Halle of Residence.
Write a letter to the college giving your accommodation requirements. you should outline what your room and food needs are and also ask what alternatives are available if they cannot provide what you want.
Dear sir,
I am writing to inform you that I am going to study in your prestigious college next year.
I want to express my satisfaction and give my accommodation requirements. I am looking for a single room with tv and bathroom inside. I would love the opportunity to stay at one of the higher floor, in a room with a balcony, so that I can enjoy the view of the entire campus.
I would be very grateful if you could provide me a room with a kitchen, in order to allow me cooking my own meals.
If that is not possible, I have to inform you that I am vegan, therefore I can only eat vegetables, fruits and few other kind of food. I absolutely have to avoid meat, fish and dairy.
I hope you won’t mind providing me a detailed catalogue of the alternatives your college offers, if the requirements aforementioned could not be satisfied.
If you have any questions please don’t hesitate to contact me at 389-987653
Yours faithfully
H.J.
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Need more sentence varieties. Most of the sentences start with the subject 'I'.
Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 6.5 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
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No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
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No. of Different Words: 100 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.611 4.7
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