The diagrams below the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used concrete for building purposes.

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The diagrams below the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used concrete for building purposes.

The particular diagrams supplied depict the preparation procedure of cement and concrete along with the tools entailed in the process. It is apparent from the pictures that the former demands out several stages whilst the latter is produced via a single step.

The production of cement commences when the mixture of clay and limestone is crushed with the use of two rotating drums until the row materials become fine powder. The procedure continues with the powder being mixed in a cylindrical mixer after which the mixture is fed into the rotating heater with the help of a long turbine. At this s...

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