Invite a friend to join you for your next vacation. Please say- What are your plans?- Why do you want to travel with him/her?- Why do you think he/she will like it?

Dear Ching,

How are you? I hope you're doing great upon reading my letter. As far as I can remember, since we graduated in college we both live a busy lives, so I have to grab this chance to invite you in a 3 day vacation which will be in three months time. In that way you will get the chance to file for a vacation leave.

I am planning to have a vacation on the three towns of Norway, namely Geiranger, Bergen and Alesund. It's a part of Europe.These are my favourite places when I was working in the cruise ship and you won't get tired of visiting regularly. As I have told you we will be spending our first day in Geiranger, Norway. It is a mountainous part where we can climb mountains with glacier, boating for we will be visiting the 7 sisters' falls. Second day, will be in Bergen where we can eat sea food burgers and it's astonishing to witness different houses joining together with a peculiar colors and shape. Last day would be the Alesund, it is one of the most historical place in Norway that houses where built amazingly with the intricate architectural design. I chose this place for our vacation since I knew that both of us appreciate nature most of the time.

I cant wait to be with you again, for me to feel that special kind of connection that once we usually felt when we were together in college.

Looking forward to hearing from you.

Jowelyn

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with glacier, boating for we will be visiting the 7 sisters' falls
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one of the most historical place
one of the most historical places

houses where built amazingly with the intricate architectural design
houses there are built amazingly with the intricate architectural design

Sentence: As far as I can remember, since we graduated in college we both live a busy lives, so I have to grab this chance to invite you in a 3 day vacation which will be in three months time.
Description: A noun, plural, common is not usually followed by a noun, singular, common
Suggestion: Refer to months and time

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