The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of sone tourists facilities.

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The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of sone tourists facilities.

The two maps illustrate the changes which occured in island over a period of time. It is clear that, this place had become more and more developed over the time shown by map.

According to the map, island was quite an undeveloped and nature place. Before developments, only some couple of trees run from the north of the area to its south. The another couple of the trees situated next to the center of the map.

After changes, only several couple of trees is still there. In the center of the island, reception that is built is surrounded by vehicle tracks. As the result of this development, visitors can travel to restaurant and pier. Restaurant is constructed to the north of the reception which locates between accommodations. Pier is established on top of the sea. Accommodations run to the west and the east of the reception. Only a few couple of trees that is surrounded by footpaths remains unchanged. As the medium of these footpaths, tourists can got to the beach and their accommodations. In the west of the map, beach stays constant , while swimming area is opened on the beach.

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occured in island over a period of time.
occured in an island over a period of time.

island was quite an undeveloped and nature place.
island was a quite undeveloped and nature place.

Sentence: The another couple of the trees situated next to the center of the map.
Description: The fragment trees situated next is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace situated with verb, base: uninflected present, imperative or infinitive

only several couple of trees is still there
only several couple of trees are still there

Sentence: As the medium of these footpaths, tourists can got to the beach and their accommodations.
Description: A modal auxillary is not usually followed by a verb, past participle
Suggestion: Refer to can and got

Sentence: The two maps illustrate the changes which occured in island over a period of time.
Error: occured Suggestion: No alternate word

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