The bar chart below shows the distribution of different income groups of men aged 25 44 in Sydney according to whether they were born in Australia or overseas

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The bar chart below shows the distribution of different income groups of men aged 25-44 in Sydney according to whether they were born in Australia or overseas.

The given bar graph compares the distribution of income groups of men aged 25-44 in Sydney in terms of whether they were born in Australia or overseas
Overall, it can be seen that the income group of men who were born in Australia had a higher income than men born overseas. In addition, the majority of the man had income levels with middle and lower-middle.
According to the chart, the middle-income level of men born in Australia was the highest, accounted for 35%, at least twice as high as those for the group of low income at the same time. The figures for lower and high income were 30 and 20 percent respectively.
On the other hand, the lower middle income was more most popular in the group of men born oversea, stood at 33 percent. While, the middle-income percentage was lower, with 27 percent. Both the groups of lower and high income were over 20 and 15 percent orderly.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ncome groups of men aged 25-44 in Sydney in terms of whether they were born in Au...
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... they were born in Australia or overseas Overall, it can be seen that the income ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, while, at least, in addition, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 33.7804878049 71% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 732.0 965.302439024 76% => OK
No of words: 160.0 196.424390244 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.575 4.92477711251 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.55655882008 3.73543355544 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51234452255 2.65546596893 95% => OK
Unique words: 86.0 106.607317073 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.5375 0.547539520022 98% => OK
syllable_count: 223.2 283.868780488 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 22.4926829268 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 72.9847621782 43.030603864 170% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.571428571 112.824112599 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8571428571 22.9334400587 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.42857142857 5.23603664747 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.13902439024 263% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.395654337275 0.215688989381 183% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.163841470519 0.103423049105 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.169673996998 0.0843802449381 201% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.285058125996 0.15604864568 183% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.166153053817 0.0819641961636 203% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 13.2329268293 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 61.2550243902 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.3012195122 92% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.58 11.4140731707 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.49 8.06136585366 93% => OK
difficult_words: 28.0 40.7170731707 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 11.4329268293 157% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.9970731707 98% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.0658536585 90% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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