The bar chart below shows the percentage of Austrailan men and women In dlffcrent age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart below compare percentages of Australian males and females who did regular body activity in one year .
It is clear that the percentage of women who did regular physical activity often is more than men except for male and female who between 15 to 24 years old. The percentage of women who did body activity , increase when the age grow up but it is approximately reverse for men.
As we seen in the bar chart the group of people who there is more than 65 , the percentage of men and women who did regular physical activity was very close to each other but in other age groups we can see many different between percentage of them.
It is noticeable that the minimum and the maximum percentage of the Australian peoples who did regular physical activity respectively are men between 35 to 44 years old and women between 35 to 40 years old.
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...ho did regular body activity in one year . It is clear that the percentage of wom...
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... than men except for male and female who between 15 to 24 years old. The percenta...
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...ercentage of women who did body activity , increase when the age grow up but it is...
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Suggestion: saw
...s approximately reverse for men. As we seen in the bar chart the group of people wh...
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...roup of people who there is more than 65 , the percentage of men and women who did...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, except for
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.0 100% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 3.15609756098 317% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 8.0 5.60731707317 143% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 21.0 33.7804878049 62% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.97073170732 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 699.0 965.302439024 72% => OK
No of words: 154.0 196.424390244 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.53896103896 4.92477711251 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.52273666998 3.73543355544 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51076630171 2.65546596893 95% => OK
Unique words: 79.0 106.607317073 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.512987012987 0.547539520022 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 229.5 283.868780488 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 3.36585365854 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 8.94146341463 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 22.4926829268 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 51.518540352 43.030603864 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.8 112.824112599 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.8 22.9334400587 134% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.8 5.23603664747 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 1.69756097561 353% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.352954101212 0.215688989381 164% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.2266917735 0.103423049105 219% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0421530762714 0.0843802449381 50% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.242668056559 0.15604864568 156% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0494293946851 0.0819641961636 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 13.2329268293 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.49 61.2550243902 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.3012195122 134% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.64 11.4140731707 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.87 8.06136585366 85% => OK
difficult_words: 17.0 40.7170731707 42% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.4329268293 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.9970731707 127% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.0658536585 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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