The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australia men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity 2010.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australia men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Submitted by Anmol jjj on Wed, 09/25/2019 - 03:00

The given bar chart elucidate the information about the physical activity of men and women group in Australian in 2010, alloying in 15 years old to 65 years and over. The data is calibrated in proportion.

Overall, the first group of age men's proportion is greater than women, despite, the third group had extremely different than the first age group, and in the end, the last group made very fewer comparisons, between men and women.

Having a quick glance it is clear that, in 2010, first group had 52.8 number a percentage was 5% more than women the regular activity at the age of 25 to 34 it took the opposite rather than first group, 52.5% of women at the age of 35 to 44 it was 13% more than women, in the fourth group of women had also the high percentage of daily physical actions.

Moving towards the rest of the information of two groups women had 53% of activities, on the other,r hand men's were on 45.1% at last men and women participation in regular activities they had only 0.4% difference between men and women in Australia

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 121, Rule ID: RATHER_THEN[2]
Message: Did you mean 'different 'from''? 'Different than' is often considered colloquial style.
Suggestion: from
...the third group had extremely different than the first age group, and in the end, th...
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Line 13, column 99, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , r
...omen had 53% of activities, on the other,r hand mens were on 45.1% at last men and...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, so, third

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 33.7804878049 95% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.97073170732 151% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 865.0 965.302439024 90% => OK
No of words: 189.0 196.424390244 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.57671957672 4.92477711251 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.70779275107 3.73543355544 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47654092396 2.65546596893 93% => OK
Unique words: 98.0 106.607317073 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.518518518519 0.547539520022 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 253.8 283.868780488 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 8.94146341463 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 37.0 22.4926829268 164% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 103.860290776 43.030603864 241% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 173.0 112.824112599 153% => OK
Words per sentence: 37.8 22.9334400587 165% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.2 5.23603664747 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.311646482305 0.215688989381 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.165164763278 0.103423049105 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0844464996068 0.0843802449381 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.202114520369 0.15604864568 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0158231170743 0.0819641961636 19% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.0 13.2329268293 144% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.3 61.2550243902 97% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.51609756098 172% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.3012195122 138% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.88 11.4140731707 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.98 8.06136585366 99% => OK
difficult_words: 30.0 40.7170731707 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.4329268293 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.8 10.9970731707 153% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.0658536585 136% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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