the bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different ages who did regular physical activity in 2010

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the bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different ages who did regular physical activity in 2010

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The bar chart illustrates the proportion of Australian Females and Males in different age groups who Did regular exercises in the year 2010.
overall, it can be seen that males in their teenage did more physical activities than females. In contrary, females participated in physical activities more than males when they were between 45 and 54 years old.
starting from the women's youngest age group, the percentage of females doing regular physical activities was 47.7% and it rose gradually till it reached the peak at 53.3% in the age group 45 to 54 then it decreased slightly from 53% to 47.7% in the age groups (55 to 64 and 65+ )
in terms of men, the graph shows that 52.8% of male teenagers did regular activities. After the age 24, the percentage dropped from 42.2% to 39.5% which is the lowest percentage in the men's charts and all of the age groups. In their mid-forties, the proportion increased slightly to 43.1% till it stopped at 46.7% in the over 65 age group which is similar to the women's percentage in their late sixties.

The bar chart illustrates the proportion of Australian Females and Males in different age groups who Did regular exercises in the year 2010.
overall, it can be seen that males in their teenage did more physical activities than females. In contrary, females participated in physical activities more than males when they were between 45 and 54 years old.
starting from the women's youngest age group, the percentage of females doing regular physical activities was 47.7% and it rose gradually till it reached the peak at 53.3% in the age group 45 to 54 then it decreased slightly from 53% to 47.7% in the age groups (55 to 64 and 65+ )
in terms of men, the graph shows that 52.8% of male teenagers did regular activities. After the age 24, the percentage dropped from 42.2% to 39.5% which is the lowest percentage in the men's charts and all of the age groups. In their mid-forties, the proportion increased slightly to 43.1% till it stopped at 46.7% in the over 65 age group which is similar to the women's percentage in their late sixties.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Overall
...id regular exercises in the year 2010. overall, it can be seen that males in their tee...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Starting
...they were between 45 and 54 years old. starting from the womens youngest age group, the...
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Line 3, column 19, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'womens the youngest'.
Suggestion: womens the youngest
...45 and 54 years old. starting from the womens youngest age group, the percentage of females do...
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Line 3, column 277, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...47.7% in the age groups 55 to 64 and 65+ in terms of men, the graph shows that 52...
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Line 4, column 202, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...owest percentage in the mens charts and all of the age groups. In their mid-forties, the p...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, then

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.15609756098 190% => OK
Pronoun: 11.0 5.60731707317 196% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 33.0 33.7804878049 98% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 858.0 965.302439024 89% => OK
No of words: 182.0 196.424390244 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.71428571429 4.92477711251 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.67297393991 3.73543355544 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57579229624 2.65546596893 97% => OK
Unique words: 98.0 106.607317073 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.538461538462 0.547539520022 98% => OK
syllable_count: 245.7 283.868780488 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 8.94146341463 67% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 22.4926829268 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 89.7973026073 43.030603864 209% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 143.0 112.824112599 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.3333333333 22.9334400587 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.33333333333 5.23603664747 25% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 1.69756097561 295% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.396613496277 0.215688989381 184% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.185110178821 0.103423049105 179% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.112412426218 0.0843802449381 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.232990906342 0.15604864568 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.107282773801 0.0819641961636 131% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 13.2329268293 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 66.41 61.2550243902 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.3012195122 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.63 11.4140731707 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.99 8.06136585366 99% => OK
difficult_words: 33.0 40.7170731707 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.4329268293 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.9970731707 127% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.0658536585 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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