The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

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The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

the information provided by the chart is about the percentage amount between men and woman in kinds age groups who did physical activity regularly in 2010. Overall, the trending which is showed by the graph that female have larger figure of percentage than male in every age groups. While that, the both data of male and female were fluctuate.
It was seems from the illustrate of chart that the female tend experience different percentage in every types of age. In 35 until 64 years old was around a half then in 65th and over was more than two-fifth as the smaller number as female. The percentage in every age groups were different regularly.
Meanwhile the men who did physical activity in Australia huge in 15th to 24th little more than a half beside that in 35 to 44 years old have the smaller figure of percentage was slightly less than two-fifth. Finally the age group over than 45 who is include as older men have number around 40%.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
the information provided by the chart is ab...
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Line 1, column 201, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...all, the trending which is showed by the graph that female have larger figure of ...
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Line 1, column 335, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'fluctuated'.
Suggestion: fluctuated
..., the both data of male and female were fluctuate. It was seems from the illustrate of c...
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Line 2, column 19, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...male were fluctuate. It was seems from the illustrate of chart that the female tend experienc...
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Line 2, column 120, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...ent percentage in every types of age. In 35 until 64 years old was around a half ...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Meanwhile,
...y age groups were different regularly. Meanwhile the men who did physical activity in Au...
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Line 3, column 208, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Finally,
...ntage was slightly less than two-fifth. Finally the age group over than 45 who is inclu...
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Line 3, column 250, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'included'.
Suggestion: included
...nally the age group over than 45 who is include as older men have number around 40%.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, if, then, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.0 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 6.8 44% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 3.15609756098 253% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 33.7804878049 83% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 778.0 965.302439024 81% => OK
No of words: 168.0 196.424390244 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.63095238095 4.92477711251 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.60020574368 3.73543355544 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.3785702369 2.65546596893 90% => OK
Unique words: 90.0 106.607317073 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.535714285714 0.547539520022 98% => OK
syllable_count: 247.5 283.868780488 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.4926829268 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.2702658302 43.030603864 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.25 112.824112599 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 22.9334400587 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.0 5.23603664747 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 8.0 1.69756097561 471% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.336049049652 0.215688989381 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.157600976822 0.103423049105 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.137278864782 0.0843802449381 163% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.231615830156 0.15604864568 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0763010468956 0.0819641961636 93% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 13.2329268293 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 61.2550243902 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.3012195122 100% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.57 11.4140731707 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.31 8.06136585366 91% => OK
difficult_words: 28.0 40.7170731707 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.4329268293 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.9970731707 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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