the bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity. in 2010(Cambridge Academic 12).

The information provided by given chart illustrates the relevant proportions of Australian men and women of various age groups doing regular exercises in 2010.

As it has shown, the amount of males' daily activities which started in 15 years old is high, over 50 percentage, keep decreasing gradually until the age of 35. This activity rate, however, rose again after next group, 44 years old age. In contrast, the females' information revealed that they had a smaller figure of percentage in the same period, nearly 44.7 percent, and it grew up to around 53 percent over time. It is just in 55 and above that women tend to less physical actions by approximately 47.1 percentage.

Moreover, the chart does depict a distinct difference among male and female categories except the age of 35 to 44, and reversely, there is no significant differences when it comes to above 65 group. Moreover, women aged 45 to 54 could reach the peak by 53.3 percentage compared to the men of same age.
In comparison, a total fluctuated flow represented in both genders' figures based on current graph, although in overall, Australian female community have a more tendency in terms of engaging actively in physical works than that of men.

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Average: 8.4 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 254, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'females'' or 'female's'?
Suggestion: females'; female's
...oup, 44 years old age. In contrast, the females information revealed that they had a sm...
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Line 5, column 200, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Two successive sentences begin with the same adverb. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...rences when it comes to above 65 group. Moreover, women aged 45 to 54 could reach the pe...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, moreover, so, in contrast

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.0 43% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 9.0 5.60731707317 161% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 33.7804878049 115% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1018.0 965.302439024 105% => OK
No of words: 206.0 196.424390244 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94174757282 4.92477711251 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.78849575616 3.73543355544 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77965081749 2.65546596893 105% => OK
Unique words: 141.0 106.607317073 132% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.684466019417 0.547539520022 125% => OK
syllable_count: 316.8 283.868780488 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.482926829268 414% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 22.4926829268 111% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.7832403456 43.030603864 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.25 112.824112599 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.75 22.9334400587 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.75 5.23603664747 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.250094409494 0.215688989381 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104799200645 0.103423049105 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0802297703189 0.0843802449381 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.158841763856 0.15604864568 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0865210339382 0.0819641961636 106% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 13.2329268293 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 61.2550243902 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.3012195122 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.67 11.4140731707 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.94 8.06136585366 111% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 40.7170731707 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.9970731707 109% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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