The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010

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The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010

The bar chart gives some information about the percentage of Australian female and male in different age groups from 15 to over 65 years who did body movements regularly in 2010. The information is given in percentage.
According to the bar chart, the largest percentage of women who did sport exercises actively was in middle-aged group of 45 to 54 and accounted for 53,3 percent whereas the largest percentage of men was in the youngest age group of 15 to 24 and it made 52.8 percent. In contrast, the least proportion of female was in the age group betweeen 55 to 64 and reached about 45,1 percentage. In addition, the lowest proportion of men who interested in doing regular sport exercises was in age group between 35 to 44 and accounted for 39,5 percent. In general, the number of Australian women went up gradually throughout a year whereas the number of male flactuated slightly and the both number of 2 genders got equal and reached 46,7 and 47,1 percent respectively.
In conclusion, it is the downward trend that the percentage of females who did regular sport exercises was higher than males, exlude the age group between 15 to 24 years old.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, so, whereas, in addition, in conclusion, in contrast, in general

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.0 100% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 6.8 118% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 3.0 5.60731707317 54% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 33.7804878049 112% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.97073170732 126% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 957.0 965.302439024 99% => OK
No of words: 201.0 196.424390244 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.76119402985 4.92477711251 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.76529505866 3.73543355544 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76572171477 2.65546596893 104% => OK
Unique words: 101.0 106.607317073 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.502487562189 0.547539520022 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 280.8 283.868780488 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 22.4926829268 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 66.8876609224 43.030603864 155% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.714285714 112.824112599 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.7142857143 22.9334400587 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.71428571429 5.23603664747 186% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.378731462631 0.215688989381 176% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.164942133497 0.103423049105 159% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.130259383857 0.0843802449381 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.266884260863 0.15604864568 171% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0622862869276 0.0819641961636 76% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 13.2329268293 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.98 61.2550243902 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.8 10.3012195122 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.92 11.4140731707 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.01 8.06136585366 99% => OK
difficult_words: 38.0 40.7170731707 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.4329268293 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.9970731707 120% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.0658536585 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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