The bar chart below shows the percentage of unemployed graduates aged 20 24 in one European country over a two year period

The given vertical graph illustrates the information regarding the proportion of jobless graduates who belong to 20-24 years old age group in one European nation over a two year period.

Overall, it can be seen that the highest percentage of unemployed graduates was men as compared to women over a period of two years.

It is crystal clear that in January 2008, the percentages of graduates men was near about 10% which was decrease in April and July 2008 and reached approximately 7% respectively.Whereas the same criteria was followed by jobless women from January 2008 to April 2008. While, in October 2008 the proportion of unemployed graduate males was increased dramatically and it accounted for around 17%. A dramatic decrease was observed in the percentage of unemployed graduates males between January 2009 and July 2009.however, the percentage of unwaged graduates males grown suddenly in October 2009.

Moving further, in October 2008 , there is a dramatic declined noticed in the proportion of unemployed females, it accounted for almost 6% in July 2009.But, it percentage of jobless graduates women was went up and reached 10% and around 14% in July 2009 and October 2009 respectively.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
Essays by the user:

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 179, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Whereas
...d reached approximately 7% respectively.Whereas the same criteria was followed by joble...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 179, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Whereas” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...d reached approximately 7% respectively.Whereas the same criteria was followed by joble...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 32, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...2009. Moving further, in October 2008 , there is a dramatic declined noticed in...
^^
Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ly 2009 and October 2009 respectively.
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, regarding, whereas, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 7.0 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 7.0 5.60731707317 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 33.0 33.7804878049 98% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1019.0 965.302439024 106% => OK
No of words: 194.0 196.424390244 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.25257731959 4.92477711251 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.73207559907 3.73543355544 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03820078942 2.65546596893 114% => OK
Unique words: 102.0 106.607317073 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.525773195876 0.547539520022 96% => OK
syllable_count: 304.2 283.868780488 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 1.53170731707 261% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 22.4926829268 120% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 46.862804536 43.030603864 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 145.571428571 112.824112599 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.7142857143 22.9334400587 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.57142857143 5.23603664747 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 3.83414634146 130% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 1.69756097561 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.236756484029 0.215688989381 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.128897633405 0.103423049105 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.113465718645 0.0843802449381 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.155273509149 0.15604864568 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.122653419734 0.0819641961636 150% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.2 13.2329268293 130% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 61.2550243902 72% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.3012195122 134% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.47 11.4140731707 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.31 8.06136585366 103% => OK
difficult_words: 41.0 40.7170731707 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 11.4329268293 162% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.9970731707 116% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.0658536585 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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